TheArcher7

Currently I have read to chapter 65. The story suffers from info dumps, the main character (not to be confused with the Author, or the protagonist, Kevin) is passive, and the meta analysis is not well implimented. Writing quality could be better. The intricate character descriptions are repeated unnecessarily. Fight scenes need some work. One spelling/grammar mistake per chapter. Story development is not very good, slow because of info dumps. Character design so far is good. The characters are clearly meant to be different from each other, they have complex backgrounds and story arc frameworks, however, it isn't always shown in their dialogue and character interactions, especially when the MC isn't engaged in the conversation. The strongest point of this novel is the thorough world building, as evidence from the lengthy info dumps. My most critical complaint is about the main character (MC). He seems to have an INFP personality type. He is passive and indecisive. When given a mission where he needs to assassinate an evildoer, he will hesitate and struggle with his values. When he knows an event where many of his fellow students and future pillars of humanity will be massacred in their sleep, he makes plans to watch from the sideline with a bowl of popcorn. The reasoning behind this decision is illogical. He wants to have as much control of the plot as possible, yet his mere existence is causing a butterfly effect which he has already acknowledged. He makes his decisions with regard to himself and not others. Indeed, he has no one to care about since even after 65 chapters we haven't met his family and he hasn't made any friends. Lastly, the purpose of the premise of this book is to vivissect writing and storytelling aspects while serving as entertainment. Omniscient Reader handles it far more maturely, the trick being that the main character thinks less, does more, and thus the readers infer that there is a vast well of knowledge in his brain. He overcomes a challenge with this knowledge and reaps rewards from a hidden task no one thought was possible, pushing the story. The MC in this book explains his vast knowledge via info dumps at irrelevant times, then proceeds to get bad grades in school because his knowledge doesn't actually work. Also he got one cheat skill with that knowledge, then he has to grind in order to be barely ready for the next event. It feels like he is lagging behind the story. It is unfortunate that the MC analyzes his situation with all that knowledge, then preserves the status quo... well... everyone else's status quo except himself.