Just binged the story this past weekend and you definitely haven’t lost your touch! The chapter flowed well and it felt like you never left.
Extra “ at the end
"You know that streamer he's been obsessed with?" Holly immediately answered Arthur, and then pointed at one of the interview tents where an attractive brunette was sitting."
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I’m shocked it needs so much exp to level up since the thief leveled up so much faster than ranger and fighter
'That should have put my ranger soul's experience bar a little over halfway,' He thought to himself, 'Maybe I should level it up and merge it, it'd be nice having some kind of range bonus.'
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The comma after: thing, didn’t
"I don't have nearly enough for even a quarter of that camp." Merlin retorted. "And we aren't even entirely sure that whatever the Despoina cult did to that thing, didn't make it immune to the flower. So it's barely a last resort, definitely not something to rely on."
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…And we aren’t even sure *if what the Despoina could did to that thing didn’t make it immune… Remove unnecessary comma and change that to if in order to make the sentence more grammatically accurate I believe
"I don't have nearly enough for even a quarter of that camp." Merlin retorted. "And we aren't even entirely sure that whatever the Despoina cult did to that thing, didn't make it immune to the flower. So it's barely a last resort, definitely not something to rely on."
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Elf’s curse? I’m guessing elves are natures favored children so alcohol and other poisons affect them for a much shorter time span so our mc’s blood might only last half as long
"The blasted elf's curse." Merlin heard the elf mutter, it seemed he had already perfectly sobered up but didn't seem too happy about this fact.
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He has gotten a ton of exp from these quests compared to the thief class so I’m guessing that the monster kills provide more exp for the classes than we realized. That fighter class took ages to level up compared to thief but this ranger class might take just as long with the way things are going
• Reward: 200 EXP, 200 Ranger Soul EXP.
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But his will wasn't strong enough.
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As wild as that would be I do prefer the route of subtle acknowledgement with more internal monologues than outright and straightforward dialogue in something as huge as this. A knowing smile and a wink for the biggest life stuff and clear communication on the minute details make for a greater story to read in my humble opinion
「You have earned +1 familiarity with Gaia.」
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Condiments ?
"These are noodles I just made this morning. The conditions are simple, there aren't any side dishes."
My Monster Fuses Everything
Sci-fi · Fatso of Stone Tile Slope