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LamenThief
male LV 4Just trying to improve my writing and eng. Discord group for my novels: https://discord.gg/zXz6Hj3RSq
2020-02-13 đã tham gia BrazilHuy hiệu 7
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I hope to post more chapters per week, I just have to manage to make it
ch 139 Surrounded
Reincarnated in the Astral World
Fantasy · LamenThief
I see. that was not the intention, but what can I do about the things in his mind? xD
Both end up sitting in the arena, breathing heavily with faces and chests dirt with blood. But while Oliver has several purple bruises on his skin, Arthur's body looks perfect, except for a few small cuts on his lips and eyebrows.
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Fantasy · LamenThief
to change which words and why?
Both end up sitting in the arena, breathing heavily with faces and chests dirt with blood. But while Oliver has several purple bruises on his skin, Arthur's body looks perfect, except for a few small cuts on his lips and eyebrows.
Reincarnated in the Astral World
Fantasy · LamenThief
ch 0 6 Shooting love and Touching Teeth Part 4: The One I'm Inspired By.
System To Survive the Wizard Harem Corruption.
Fantasy · tuyw
of course Nyx will encourage his most deep and sinful desires since she's a demon. Also, she didn't change her attitude out of nowhere, she had 3 years of time skip living with him, inside him, feeling the same as him and understanding his past life. She still has a shy side, but when things get serious, she acts serious. and Aria, well, she has dozens of years of life and a past that has formed her personality until now. manipulative? a little. controlling? a little. over protective? very. If these points bother you, bad news, they won't change to please you
ch 27 Complicated Relationships
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Fantasy · LamenThief
I would love to write a mass release more than any reader read it for real. But it's easier to say than actually do... I need to get more motivation to write fast to save it, so thx for the positive feedback
ch 131 Luxurious Main Hall
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Fantasy · LamenThief
most of the readers who complain want the characters to be made of perfections while I believe they are more defined by imperfections. But at the end of the day, I'm a poor guy, so all I care about is that the novel has readers willing to unlock the chapters with coins so I don't starve without any money xD
"You did well, my son," Draven calls Arthur his son again. "You can't let any man speak like that about your mother, even if she's wrong."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
the captain obvious is literally the perfect reader for any writer on WB, you can see that based on how any writer reacts to his comments. He always has something nice to say even when it's negative criticism about things that could be improved. he is polite and funny. you, on the other hand... I'm poor, but I would give the little money I have to never see a comment from you on my novel again because you are annoying af
"I'm only going to say this once," Arthur speaks in a serious tone and puts his thumb on the guy's eye. "If you look at her again, I'm going to rip it out and stick it in a place you won't like at all..."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
Don't blame me for your mind problems. and if you find the novel gross, wtf are you doing still here?
Yet, Nyx becomes concerned and exclaims in his mind. "Baka! What are you doing???"
Reincarnated in the Astral World
Fantasy · LamenThief
Latin. and has meaning
"Deus Ignis, da mihi potentiam solis ardenti…"
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Fantasy · LamenThief
yep, you can leave now. and you don't need to judge bad something that doesn't hurt anyone, that's just toxic
When saying that, Draven can't help but feel bad for not having Aria's love for so many years. He had to look for other women in the village to satisfy his needs and it only made him lose any chance of having Aria again, even though he still isn't willing to give up.
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Fantasy · LamenThief
Am I saying it or is some character saying it? when a reader doesn't know the difference between the author's opinion and that of a character about other fictional characters... yeah, it's called "dumb," but I tried using "bad reader" not to offend too much
Before Aria gets emotional again, she focuses on the problem at hand. "Alright, we only have a week to work, so you need to prepare yourself. We already have the advantage of knowing when the enemy is coming thanks to the runes I placed on the road, and you know the region as well, so you can focus on getting stronger."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
kill someone they don't know and don't know if it's their enemy? I was making MC go down a path like that, but it seems pretty irrational and not interesting to be honest, glad my good readers don't think like you so they gave me a good feedback about it in the most recent chapters
Before Aria gets emotional again, she focuses on the problem at hand. "Alright, we only have a week to work, so you need to prepare yourself. We already have the advantage of knowing when the enemy is coming thanks to the runes I placed on the road, and you know the region as well, so you can focus on getting stronger."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
Why would they hide from their family in their own kingdom where everyone could recognize them? that's a NO, man
"How did you end up like this, Draven?" the woman asks. "You look nothing like the man you once were…;" 'Perhaps there's nothing left of him inside,' "None of the man I admired above all… nothing left of my brave and kind big brother."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
Also, your other replies were censored by WN and I don't know what they were about. well, you look like someone who can't even reply anything decently to defend toxic people who only complain. Do you understand how not having someone like that as a reader is so much better for me? Why can't I want to have good readers and avoid the bad ones?
"I love her so much..."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
Criticism has to make sense, otherwise it's just a meaningless complaint. This guy and others complain about how the characters are, and this one is still quite ambiguous, in these cases, the problem is not my bad English or my way of explaining things, they simply don't like the content, so why continue reading? If you read all the comments, you'll see how I welcome constructive criticism (which is usually about something bad)
"I love her so much..."
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Fantasy · LamenThief
good question, you may find out if you keep reading
And even though they don't share the same ideas and not even the same bed, Arthur always saw his parents as a very united couple. At least they never fought in front of him or anything like that.
Reincarnated in the Astral World
Fantasy · LamenThief
I understand. I lost my hand at some point and failed to bring interesting things. yet, I can't give up on the story, so I'll try to improve it for readers who are still interested. thx for your time and support anyway
ch 135 Mysterious Lis
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Fantasy · LamenThief