Not a bad story at all. great development and a good pace. Its still in the beginning stages but that's fine. There is a lot of potential to the story.
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Very pleasant story to read, something worth taking a moment and checking out. If you are bored and have some time. The chapters are quick pace and smooth. It isnt too long at all. keep it up.
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the story have a nice flow to it. it is easy to read, fun, enjoyable to pass time. peronsally, the first chapter was a bit slow for me, but when you get past that, its gets much more enjoyable. I recommend this story if you are interested in gaming type of story.
A gaming type of story. I enjoyed it. Even though its only a few chapters, i can see the potential in the story. There are a few grammar mistakes but those can be fixed. I like how quick and easy the story is to read and not to heavy. its a great start. keep it up
What i like about this story was how sweet and conise the story moved. It did not have too many stumbling blocks but it was pleasanr overall. I do would like to see a bit more showing at certain times when he feels, other than that its a nice reincarnation story. its only just started but the possibilities is endless.
im not sure what you mean?
"Hold your damn horses, I'm working on it," Jones grumbled under his breath, saying a couple of words in a foreign language that sounded close to Jamaican. He glared at Timothy for rushing him.
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