Thanks for the review.
The opening scene still needs to be improved with additional narration or descriptions so that it can be clearer to the reader what really happened. At this time it is still confusing. But after that, the story goes smoothly. The characters are interesting and the background is unlocked little by little. I was able to read the first five chapters quickly. It's an interesting spy-action story full of potential. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you so much for your review.
Hi. Since this is just the beginning of the story, I can't really rate it too much. But if I may give a little advice, I think the writing style is a bit confusing. The grammar still needs to be checked, and some sentences, especially the long ones, need to be cut into shorter sentences so that they can be better understood by the readers. The tempo and scene switching is also a bit too fast. Some parts need narration and description here and there so that the atmosphere can be felt better. However, the theme of this detective murder story is quite interesting and has potential. Keep on with it and make it better.
A bit confusing but also interesting.
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original Northmen Saga
"I can judge friend or foe. I know which one is a big wolf, which one is a small dog, and which one is a small dog who only pretends to be a big wolf. You, big wolf." --- William had promised his mother not to go to the Northern Land and find out about his father's killer. But when he killed several bandits by the river, he had no choice but to flee north and finally revealed the secrets of his parents and origins. --- Follow the rest of my story in Royal Road.30 Chs 58 sưu tầm
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Master of Realm: Choose Your Own Fate
You are the son of the Count of Ellandhar, a part of the Kingdom of Merovia. Your life is fun and your country is safe, so you can still play games with your friends every day. But those peaceful days won't last long. Various kinds of threats are waiting in all directions, ready to emerge at the most unexpected moments and destroy everything you have. Are you ready to become your father's successor and become the leader of your country? And if the opportunity arises, will you be able to reach the higher positions, to become the master of your realm? Choose your path wisely. Your fate is in your own hands. This is a choose your own adventure story. At the end of each part, there will be a poll. The story will progress according to the choices you make. --- Follow the rest of my story in Royal Road.10 Chs 21 sưu tầm
Thank you for your review. :)
Northmen Saga
Fantasy · RD_Villam