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1 years ago
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I will apologized first since it may be me just ranting cause the mc is annoying me. Sorry, and feel free to just ignore it. Okay, Im getting a bit irratated on some part of this novel. The entire premise is good and interesting but the character and chapter is getting on my nerve. At this moment, when it come to severus trauma, it seem that the logical side, Vader is failing pitifully to lower it. It between a complete irrational dark side rage or a full blown restraint. Maybe i wrong, but the minute black and potter attack, the mc should be decisive enough to knock them out. If he can't control himself, he should have train in that than what he been doing in the previous chapters. Doesnt Occulumency help? The Lily situation is annoying to me personally and i wish the MC would just move on. Around her, he being restraint or too mindful of her. It feel like he is going to overlap padma and lily together and stop him from doing something logical. He is not Dark Vader but he is not a goodie two shoe. The relationship between the two woild just be toxic. Now for the chapters. I know each chapter can't have important stuff in it for story progression, but something can be finished in two or three lines. I feel like the pass four chapter before the duel could have been put into one. I apologized, i feel like I'm ranting and it probably best to ignore it, but im just saying what i feel. The book is good with just a few annoying points to me.

1 years ago
Replied to Deisy_Marin

Rather than have her crush, it would have been better if he just didnt bother with her. Severus already apologize and she didnt accept it. The new Severus should as he already said before, call it a day and ignore her. Make the both of them go on with their life. It might be less toxic that way.

2 years ago
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I honestly hope he doesn't compromise too much just because the suppose protector of earth are so easily manipulated.

2 years ago
Replied to God_Doom

Not to mention Raven and Zatanna have a lot of potential. Maybe not the physically strongest but they have magic and magic could do alot if properly used.

2 years ago
Replied to xMelGodx

Good luck

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2 years ago
Replied to The_Great_Sage69

Doesn't make it better it. He should used a clone.

2 years ago
Commented

Mikasa going to kill someone.😂😂

2 years ago
Commented

It is good and the prospect of Burning Martian power or any Martian power is awesome. Wish you release more though.