Demolok

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2018-09-18 đã tham gia Denmark
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Demolok
3 months ago
Commented

you need to keep your timeline straight in the last chapter you wrote weeks of using the branch but in this one you write 1 week

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Demolok
3 years ago
Commented

+1

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Demolok
3 years ago
Commented

the story so far is good you just need to get the pronouns correct

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Demolok
3 years ago
Commented

+1

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Demolok
3 years ago
Commented

F/F + 1

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Demolok
3 years ago
Posted

if you're gonna write an English story the n do that don't mix 2 languages it's a headache to read ..,......................................

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