Please, don't use 'young man' word. Cringe! And Your narrative style is not fluent and you make unnecessary time jumps. It's like watching a video skipping from the 5th minute to the 20th minute and then moving on to the 2nd minute, so can I explain it that doesn't make sense? It would be better if you explain it step by step without unnecessary jumps. I don't see any other problems👍 [img=recommend]
yes, he can easily copy this power from Steve
I dont like nawaki
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He is always eating, sitting and no training. This is trash fic
Boring story.
This is too much
It's a complete garbage story. MC is an idiot, an idiot who doesn't even think about a few days ahead, doesn't make plans, and reveals all his power without hiding himself. He might also be the most incompetent ninja ever. He reveals himself and is surprised when his life is in danger as a result. attention! trash story can drive the reader crazy.
Whst a trash
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original Whales and Unicorns: A Skagosi SI ( ASOIAF)
Waking up inside the mind of Cregan Magnar, the new lord of the shittiest part of the shittiest...14 Chs 67 sưu tầm
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Purple Days (ASOIAF)
From one day to the other, Joffrey Baratheon wakes up a changed man. Far from the spoiled boy-child known to the court of King's Landing, the Joffrey that comes out of his room three days after the death of John Arryn walks with the stride of a veteran commander and leader of men. A scholar, a sea-captain, a general, a lover. This is the story of how he became that man, and how he came to know his purpose through a cycle of endless death and rebirth that saw him explore both his self and the known world from Braavos to Sothoryios and from Old Town to Yi-Ti... and beyond.17 Chs 56 sưu tầm
Baristan and jamie same level but arthur dayne another level you must understand
Game of Thrones : Nano Machines
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