dont adjust shit for the readers. the only thing adjustable is spelling and punctuation. its your story. its our job to enjoy the ride.
more chapthers please
im sorry but this story is all over the place whats the point of foreshadowing if it isnt utilized. you add more and more depth but you dont go deeper down the path you set. you just branch off again and again.
well that's better than most
I hope you drop some more today author
nooo a cliffhanger
where you at? we need moar
lab analyst where I just test samples all day
Did I die? Well, that was pretty pathetic. I can't believe I was going to die in such a mundane way. Hahaha, maybe my death will be in the paper tomorrow. I was joking, but deep down, I was pretty sad about my death. I guess it was my fault for not believing in God. I was born into a Christian family, and my parents tried to preach this religion to me since I was young. They always told me to have faith in God and that everything would work out. But when I grew up and became interested in science, I saw that God and religion were silly. When I turned 18, I left home to live alone in London because of a scholarship from an award-winning college. I never had many friends, and when I came to London, I distanced myself from the few I had.
Fantasy · Fabio_Henrique_5198
that's how many protagonists are born
Alaric, with a swing of his sword, beheaded a woman, and 2 children all at once. The women had already seemed dead before being beheaded, but the children had looks of despair washed upon their faces. Especially Penny, whose worldview collapsed upon her death.
Fantasy · Reawakening
why so fucking expensive?
Shadow Being System
Fantasy · thesage196