AuHNG

The story really be storying guys. reviews are difficult to write let me just write random stuff here. There we go, hopefully this works well.

The plot is developing, but I would suggest working a bit on the writing quality. Use grammarly or other grammar checkers to catch minor mistakes or something, because sometimes it can be difficult to notice on a fist read.

There's potential, but I'm not the audience. I think you should look towards other authors in the genre and see what they do. Ok, that's all.

Ignore the reading status, I went back to reread. This story has a lot of potential, though it doesn't develop the stakes immediately, and is a bit more of a mystery when it comes down to it. Looking forward to reading more.

Thats the first chapter, not the first chapter of the novel. Damn it, I hate how webnovel skips over the prologues.

Let me know what do u mean by beginning? Like prologue or chapter 1? I think people tend to find chapter 1 confusing when they accidentally skip the prologues.

Alright so here’s my critique: chapter kind of reads like AI, cause every chapter ends with a: and so the hero’s embark once more tupa stuff. Remove that, and just end the chapter on a cliffhanger.

So far, it’s really good, although I do have to say that the chapter starts of a bit grizzly for any of y’all that aren’t super into that. Gonna continue reading this novel and post my final thoughts on this review.