ShadowChummer

I mean that it shifted the focus of the story away from the MC and Naruto with a long fight without the same weight in emotional payoff. Hiroshi was there saving his child... but since he arrived, that was already resolved( I mean the narrative tension). And even that didn't have the same amount of set up as the kids conflicts. The long fight became more about the fight itself and not about another meaning like Naruto proving himself worthy as a ninja. Or could have been about the MC proving he is strong to his father and why he should train in medical ninjutsu. The scene turned to how amazed they were at how strong Hiroshi is... but this never was a conflict in the narrative beforehand. The final fight didn't give us a payoff to what was building up nor kept building upon it. But don't mind too much my criticism. The fight was interesting and well written and set up new plot points for the future. I just disliked it as an ending to the arc because it wasn't a culmination to everything that came prior. It was a fight between two characters that we didn't have the time to care about. And I know that it is very hard to always keep set up and payoff while writing... especially in webnovels. I just commented because you've seen to me as an author who genuinely put an effort into your story and always wants to improve your craft.

I didn't like it. I wanted to like it because it was original and different... but it didn't make logical nor narrative sense. It just felt a cool fight just for the sake of a cool fight. I had to mentally check out to power through it... so I couldn't even enjoy how cool the fight was. Mizuki shouldn't struggle against the kids or the ashen blade shouldn't struggle against him. Fire should have been strong against wind or it should have been established that the system works differently in this universe. And as a final fight it took away from what the story was building up. I usually never comment, but this time I see the potential in the author to be better