Khavos_Rudd

Khavos_Rudd

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Aspiring writer

2018-02-23 đã tham gia Kenya
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Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
5 months ago
Posted

MC xcter does NOT match his experiences. He lives in a world where women rule. At least, the highest levels of power. Just a few chapters into the novel, it becomes clear that witches used their monopoly over magic to force the world I to submission. He KNOWS that Magi are automatically executed. He WANTS to learn all about his inheritance. ... And when he is captured he goes with the flow? No terror at his obvious fate? Then he is made or can be made into a battery. Where is the rage? The anger and helplessness at his fate? Your entire race has been wiped out but you barely even care? Someone here just said he doesn't know the Magi so there's no reason to be upset over their fate. Ok... But you are the same race. Right in the enemy camp. A slave already. The truth is that the author is only interested in developing the romance element to the detriment of all others. Allowed. But everything else must match the world and make sense.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Replied to Thesilverderp

I'm thinking, if this novel goes for like 2000 chapters, them a modest 20 chapters of harem and romance are enough. Any more would be excessive and filler. Less would be ideal.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Replied to Thesilverderp

Lose the Dream Girl hinted at by the mom. Then proceed with killing off any others that even stink of a romantic relationship developing. The novel will be better.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Commented

I think an uninfluenced Ves would have directly interacted with the Ace. He knows by now that there is serious trouble coming over from Messer 87. Moreover, the more high-profile he is the better for him and his clan. At the end of the day, even if the Red Asso. values him, they will not coddle his brilliance by restricting his movements. They might actually permanently assign on ace pilot on his guard unit and still let him run around. I think the decision to go such a long way around with Alexa is a flawed decision influenced by the Crown. Sure, Ketis is 't an 'official' apprentice if this chapter is correct, but she has been with him for years and still hasn't grasped his skill. What makes Alexa special enough to succeed?

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Commented

I expect the nxt few dozen or so chapters to be slower, more "slice of life" so to speak.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Replied to smgo27911

warlords are the Expedition or Pioneer leaders in charge of any raiding parties. Warfighters are the mech pilots, fighter pilots, and warship pilots doing the fighting.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Replied to Konnect

No even distributions allowed. He has to make a choice for one of the three plans...unless Exlor throws another curve and we see a 4th plan. Don't expect that, but this story keeps me in Sect F5

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Commented

Ok Exlor, you proved why this is the only novel over 2500 words that I have kept at.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
1 years ago
Commented

Still missing your work. The world you created hard a way of making cultivation matter.

Khavos_Rudd
Khavos_Rudd
2 years ago
Replied to BlurryBee

Yeah. From the synopsis, the novel sounds empty. I expect it will be something akin to a peanut gallery munching around while the MC never steps out of his shell.

  • Soulless original

    Soulless

    Sci-fi

    Undesirables, once slated for pain and torture through experimentation, are now the final hope of the universe. What they do once they obtain power is indicative of human nature.

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