The story idea had potential, however, the MC experiences far too little wholesome development. It feels too shallow and most of the development is pointless to what a riveting story would entail.
Honestly although quite wordy at times, the story is decently written. The mc is what I have a hard time believing. Now if it wasn't a transmigration story and the kid grew up in a home where he was pandered to and he had gained a very disdaining attitude towards pretty much everyone, then I can definitely see him being the character that he is now. It feels as if everyone but him is an idiot or a sycophant in his viewpoint. This could be a legitimate character that grows by discovering that he is not the center of the universe and that people generally don't like teenagers with explosive mood swings no matter how intelligent or handsome they may be. He could learn tact and humility for starters.
Very unique idea that the repressed memories of his past self have to be unlocked to gain skills that he already had in the future. The concern I have is what happens when he reaches equilibrium with his past knowledge? Even he states that he didn't get very far due to a past injury that is now resolved in this time line. Where will the new knowledge cone from once he has reached his previous peak?
Very well designed. The story really draws you in with the unique mutated ability of the main character. His moral compass is also a bit refreshing since he doesn't seem to agonize too much and over think of the consequences of his actions. I mean he thinks but doesn't seem to overly care about being seen as perfectly good.
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original Awakening Into One's Own (Apothecaries Awakening) (Psuedo - LitRPG)
Are you looking for: *Realistic Dungeons *Crossing between split time-lines *Believable progressive growth *Apothecary work with an eccentric teacher *And more? Andrew thought they were testing for a Virtual Reality. He was half-right. No one really knew how the global medical and scientific empire, Millennial Enterprises came about. All that they knew was that they had risen from the ashes of World War III, and brought about miracle-like changes never before seen to a world in desperate need of a savior. Now, nearly half a century after the war, having contributed the most towards society's restoration, and despite introducing the necessary technology years before, they were finally dipping their own toes into the Virtual Reality sector. Jumping at an opportunity to participate, Andrew felt that he finally might have an in on getting his sister's currently incurable ailment resolved. It was a horrifically mutated disease like few others that came about in the aftermath of the war. Not all was as it seems though. Powerful corporations always have an agenda. It just wasn't known, what was their intention and what was the catch? ********** Warning!!: This is a slow burn story focused on Mental and Emotional development(with violence sprinkled in), as that is the basis behind the main character's power. ********** This becomes a Truer Lit-RPG with far more action at the start of Book 2, but I won't ruin the surprise. ********** Monday/Wednesday/Friday releases68 Chs 4 sưu tầm
Shameless review by author: The ability of the main character starts out being nerfed with good reason as you'll learn later. As he lives in and experiences this alternate reality which he and many others believe to be a virtual reality, he experiences periods of personal growth which lead to the stimulation and growth of his budding power. This story is meant to provide a place of escape and thrill for the reader, but also a place to strengthen oneself for when it is time to return to and face your own life again. May the reading of this story deeply touch your heart and soul in terrifying and thrilling ways as it has mine in the writing of it.
Awakening Into One's Own (Apothecaries Awakening) (Psuedo - LitRPG)
Fantasy · Jade_Theif