Tyftc! I liked reading this other perspective. Far too many stories stick with 2 to 1 pov characters and it gets really tiring and samey. So what I guess the take away is, nice job keeping things fresh. Keep trusting yourself as I do 👍
If you can look past the plot contrivances, you may enjoy the story. I couldn't. Despite being the only possible suspect left, he manages to avoid all suspicion, only to flex his newfound powers the very next day. I quit reading on the spot, so it may get better, but I'll never find out. The good thing is that this happens very early on, so you might as well give the story a try. It won't take too long to see if it's for you.
Tyftc! Hopefully, Enid stays around, but it'd make for sense if she were to disappear for a while. That being said, it also makes more since that she would win in the end. Aside from Luke's honeymoon phase, I doubt Wednesday is truly compatible with him. I guess I'll just see how it plays out.
Tyftc, and take a good rest brother (or sister). You more than deserve it.
Just read it already, it doesn't take long to know if you should add it to your library. Ignore the following. There a minimum word count for a review apparently, so I'm just filling it. Consider downloading the app so you can see the pictures.
Tyftc!
Tyftc, I'm not very convinced on how revolutionary that Genjutsu is, but I'll certainly willing to be surprised. For infiltration, hand signs are somewhat of a giveaway, even without knowing what the jutsu may be (like a sorcerer subtle spell but you still do the somatic component, it's sus). For stealth, you already have the initiative and likely a plan of action, and silent codes that require no chakra at all, so slightly redundant. I'm looking forward to how you use it.
There should only be one hand sign for the jutsu, and with enough proficiency the user can forgo the hand sign. You can choose which one specifically, but if it were up to me I'd use a unique hand sign resembling the dharmachakra mudra, but that's non canon. Up to you.
Just to explain why I chose that name, achieving Nirvana is the ultimate goal in Buddhism, and Nirvana is just the concept of a flow state on steroids. This jutsu essentially cheats your way there, hence the 'False'. However, with enough mastery you can reach Nirvana without even casting the jutsu. In this sense, 'False' has another but different meaning. Referring to a fake jutsu, as the ultimate mastery of the jutsu is to never have to cast it. However, Nirvana for a ninja is impossible to achieve, so for them it will always be a 'False Nirvana'. It's a reminder of the brutal nature of the ninja world. But for civilians this 'False Nirvana' carries a slightly different meaning. One of reaching true Nirvana.
Tyftc, get some more well deserved rest!
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