- grammar is pretty bad - simple spelling mistakes that should have been caught by spellcheck are ignored and not fixed - "push ups for arm strengthening and sit ups for leg strengthening"
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon
honestly, only 28 chapters in but the quality of this fanfic is way above others. the characters don't suddenly become cringe or change immensely half way through like in other fanfics. The chapters are packed and super long so even though there are only 70-80 chapters, it's probably be the equivalent of 200-300 of another story. Truly, a great story.
A chapter called "Lucifer and the Princess" is 90% him killing rabbits and getting stats, and 10% some vague appearance of Lucifer and the POSTER of the princess. No need to make filler chapters like this lol.
The story seems fine so far (I'm only on chapter 59 at the moment though), but I HAD to write this review. There are so many inconsistencies with skills and random facts. There are moments when he can use skills with a long cooldown almost instantly. His enraged slash skill (that can only be used to kill monsters at the same level) has been used to kill monsters above his level too. I'm not sure if there will be some huge reveal that explains why this is allowed later but as a reader getting through the chapters, it just feels like the author doesn't even remember their own material at times (specifically with the game skills). I don't know how the UI works on this site, but if there are actual mistakes, the author should fix them and rewrite parts of the story so that it's consistent. A story with such a high rating shouldn't have so many mistakes in it. I can't rate the stability of updates, character design, or world background since I'm not that far in the story yet but... writing quality is a 3/5 since the grammar isn't atrocious like some other fan novels but those inconsistencies stand out a lot.
you would be surprised how far some people go to find usernames without numbers. with the population being high enough for humans to occupy other planets, there's no way a name like Lucifer isn't taken even if it's mostly forgotten. try playing a game and using some "cooler" Latin words as a username and you'll understand
[Username available... Does the user want to create a new look or use their own?] (People forget who Lucifer and Christian God were.)
Fantasia · Zhanye
how the heck is HXH a weak world but attack on titan is perfectly ok??? a single strong hunter from hxh could probably bring all the titans to extinction
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Anime e quadrinhos · InGlorious
don't basilisks kill unless it's through indirect eye contact? shouldn't be petrify here
The Basilisk slithered out and slowly approached the meat before sniffing. Cross smiled and heard a voice in his mind "Who are you boy?" Cross smiled and said "A friend? Whatever makes you comfortable. I couldn't care less." the Basilisk looked at Cross and asked "Why aren't you petrified?" Cross shook his head and said "A lower species wants to petrify me? Are you joking?"
Filmes · Monkey_Godking
isn't she a university student that reincarnated... mental age well over 30 now.... with a little kid half her mental age....
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Anime e quadrinhos · ForgeCoffee