Xianxia: Tortoise  Longevity Art

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Aurora_Ryan

In my new work on the pursuit of immortality by the main character, to the extent of venturing and investing in space exploration, when compared to other humans, what he lacks the most is not time. Please readers bear with any issues that might be related to word quality. Try my best, and please support this novel!

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SovereignOfDarc

I must say this was a good read so far , looking forward to the new chapters that are to come.  Its good to see a story where the MC isn't some young master who tries to get stronger for any reason like saving a girl or revenge. Also, not like a lot of the newer novels where MC is an evil being that goes around causing chaos.  I believe, so far, this novel is going in the direction of a type of novel I have wanted to read but have yet to find , where MC just lives to improve himself while being able to live longer than others.  I must say it would be good if MC could stay neutral and that we can just experience his life improving as well as his journeys through space and different worlds. Keep up the good work!

Okay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Deserve some praise for this one. It seems you did not sleep while writing like the other one. Big up! Continue working hard and with this one we will be taking all the votes for you.

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ArrogantYungMaster

As of Ch. 225 I’ll be honest I’m a little torn on my thoughts on this novel. I shall explain why. First of all the overall concept of the novel is great, author does well to make sure there are no plot holes in terms of the MC’s decision making or how he advances in strength. The pace of the novel is also good, it’s fast enough that you can enjoy the progress and also understand what’s going on. The word count for every chapter is also really long, and finally the storyline itself is GOOD. I’ll be real though, there’s a massive info dump in this novel. It’s not very noticeable early on but as you hit the later chapters, it goes into extreme depth with the MCs thought process, reasonings behind his actions and then over explains everything that’s happening. I, for one, don’t mind info dumps if they’re done correctly. But that amount I’ve read, and where the story is currently at don’t add up. It becomes a pain to read at some point because you can see the MC being fleshed out and improving with every chapter but in the grand scheme of things the MC is literally going from a power level of 10 to 11 and the people he’s catching up to are sitting on 100. (This is an example, not a spoiler). The crazy part though is that because every chapter is condensed (and long which I like), you can’t help but think that the story is progressing well when in reality there’s not a lot happening (much like DBZ fight). Sigh aside from the insane info dump, the only other thing I can point my finger at is that things that happen in the novel seem erratic and displaced. For instance, the MC will be breaking through a stage, and then the POV will randomly switch to his senior sister going through her own troubles, and then it’ll switch to some random disciple from a different faction talking with his faction friend etc. This just led to me skipping over some sections because I was just more interested in what was happening with the MC and I think that takes away from what the author was trying to do. Ultimately, the problems I’ve mentioned aren’t super big and can be improved upon and I think it’ll make the nocel much easier to read. If you’re considering reading this novel just go ahead and have a read. It does start a little differently that most other novels like this start but the storyline starts to get interesting after the first few chapters (I think 10?). My brain hurts.

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GifflarGod

Rereview: Story is a complete mess.. writing is so bad that it is hard to understand anything in the novel.. There are too many things that I'm unable to understand that the novel should be rewritten completely.. it is very bad novel

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GamingwithGreat

Well the idea is unique and future looks promising but we didn't get to see any of his past experience so he kind of feels withdrawn from the world...Maybe add some potential partner in the later story.. overall great writing

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Fifth_Daoist

Hey Vsauce, Micheal here. Our MC's journey is a coincidence. Or is it?

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Forgettable_Author

To an experienced authors, I want some advice for creating a novel. How many word counts do I have to achieve in each chapter? Do I have to start in building my characters growth? Advice in having better world building development? Something like that. This is a respectful request, I want to create my own novel that both of us can enjoy.I am creating as a way for my passion to be a writer and what's better than to ask you guys. I am thankful for your kind thoughts in answering my concerns. Hope you have a good day fellow readers and authors.

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LostEra

first impressions after reading the first 50 chapters. So far an interesting story about a man who 'accidentally' found a cultivation technique that allows him to live for a very long time. After a long time of cultivation and pushing earth technology to an higher from the shadows he is discovered by some powerful creatures who guide him to leave earth and go to a dimension where humans cultivate. He is 'guided' to join a sect and start his cultivation journey. I like that the story is told in a different way than the cultivation stories from Chinese writers (different pacing, different starting point and route towards the furst cultivation steps, etc) while still being a cultivation story. It gives the story a fresh feeling (starting as sci-fi and changing into cultivation in a way not seen very often). What I also like is that although the mc is starting out with the mc receiving all kinds of 'plot armor' and lucky encounters it is told in such a way that it is not just luck that will make the mc strong, he earns it with smart choices. And on this platform one of the best things I could say is that so far I haven't seen an 'idiotic young master' type of character (I hate those characters bc they often get themselves and their family killed for the dumbest of reasons. They are called cannon fodder for a reason but more often than not it doesn't do the image of the mc in the eyes of the reader much good. An antagonist who acts out of logical reasoning make the main character look better when he defeats them) Not everything is great but so far I have only found minor things and not things like where the story and character development breaks world building. Think of things like sound in space, small mistakes that are also often made in movies and animation. And another thing that sometimes can be better is the distinction between narrator and character. When is the narrator talking about the mc, when is the narrator talking in general. In other words small things that could often be fixed with a slight restructuring of some sentences or paragraphs. The story is interesting, plays out in an interesting world and told in an entertaining way. I hope it can hold this energy in later chapters too.

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The_Sophic

while the book is good, is this a translated Chinese book?, I can see a lot of subtle communistic views being portrayed 🤔

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Godking_Horus

Pretty good so far. I like the concept of an Immortal faction. Certain parts can be kind of confusing but overall a good read.

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Lord_of_Endless

This novel is legendary please continue to update

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Rahab_Kingosi

New here and this is this is recommended by a friend. Currently sitting by the window in a rainy weather with a laptop and reading this while taking hot tea just makes my day refreshing. Thanks for the chapters and do not change development style suddenly

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Danny_DannyRK

I like the way your new work is trying to go in a whole new direction and all, after it is tiring to always read about some unlucky guy trying to get revenge for being rejected by a girl. "Boy! Ain't got no manners..." How many people get rejected daily and it does not be come the highlight of their life. Keep that up, but if the story starts developing such symptoms, I'm bailing

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Aurora_Ryan

Updates halfway there! Support the author's releases, and leave behind some feedback to help improve my writing skills!

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Arkaon

I just got bored, I wasn't for me, and I don't like musk, so seeing his last name again and again just irk me.

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Alien_X

The start was great but he slowly loses his character and the story development becomes weird and un-understandable. Slowly I feel like his goal is not to be immortal it's weird he has a disciple or love interest I don't understand what's going on.

Enjoying work, please work on the issue of updates, been almost 20 days and only close to 3 chapters released so far. What is going on man?

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Drozia

the most obvious flaw i can see are the way author word things. It's like reading mtl while you're out of it from what i can tell, just without the inconsistency of names, titles and etc. The second thing i'll say is that my suspense of disbelief immediately collapsed because of the implications from a couple sentences that relates to the science and logic of your world (the best wording i can do currently to get across my meaning). And yes while this is a xianxia novel and you shouldn't judge it based on real world physics but this novel also started on earth and should at least make some effort at being grounded in physics (even if it's the physics of sci fi media)Tldr: Wording definitely needs a lot of work and make some basic research on science because it reads like the science comprehension of a conspiracy theorist or someone who has enough knowledge of the existence of those words but only a halfway there to basic comprehension of them and how they relate.

Excited, here, why not add more than one chapter daily, the single chapter daily routine is too slow. Read through the work too before posting to reduce the small mistakes