Vampire Mafia Princess - Tales of Nocturnia

Amazing plot!!!!! Really liked the character interactions and how their overall development as well as the picturesque setting. Must read!! 10/10

Very intrigued to see where this will go. The writer’s sense of detail when portraying the subject is keen. My only critique might be off of how forward some of the introduction is. Keep up the great work!

I really like Lyra and I am curious on this essence abilities is there more information about it? Also, what is Sanguine? IS it a type of Vampire all other i like the story but it can better if you flesh out each character better

I love this story it. It started off really slow but it really starting to pick up. This character's are very compelling. I'm busting at the seams to see what happens next.

The book has a decent structure and some well-crafted characters, but overall, it fell short of my expectations. While the plot had potential, it felt rushed at times and left many storylines underdeveloped. Characters were introduced with intriguing backgrounds, only to be quickly sidelined and forgotten. This made it hard to connect with the world the author was trying to create. Additionally, the pacing was uneven, making certain sections feel dragged out while others were too brief. It’s an okay read, but it could benefit from more thorough character development and a more balanced narrative flow.

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Keneru

Author hear. Some of my inspiration on this novel is I wanted a grow a powerful character from the beginning starting with a strong foundation. A character we can see mature throughout the series

I love Nocturnia so much. More OC i love OC I want everyone to make more original characters. I have absolute no clue what Lyra or her family looks like please add aspects on how people look so i can have a visual idea

The book is well structured based on the author and easy going. I love this book, can't wait for new chapters. All the characters are well designed and constructed. However if I had to offer feedback. Is that the story introducing character and completely disregards them. Maybe keep them for longer so we can understand the world

The world of Nocturnia is so cool. I would like to know more and what is her "telepathic" that mean. Overall i like the energy and there is some awkward dialogue but i love the pace!

Great comic way to go and keep up the good work. I also i checked your Fandom. It definitely needs more work. glad you are writing and keep going

Really cool story! I haven’t read a vampire fantasy series in a while and the world seems very intriguing in terms of lore and potential! now I’m wondering how everything will turn out in Lyras story 👀

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Mario_Sonic_Fuse

Sanguine Essence technique you should add a chracter like Choso from JJK he would be so cool with as a vampire. He is pretty much a vampire. But i like your story

This book is a captivating and well-structured read that flows effortlessly from chapter to chapter. The characters are thoughtfully developed, each adding depth to the story. I find myself eagerly waiting for the next installment. One suggestion for improvement is to give more attention to the characters that are introduced, allowing them to stay in the narrative longer. This would enhance our understanding of the world and make the story even more immersive. Overall, it's an excellent read that I highly recommend!

Vampire Mafia Princess i see the vampire but where is the mafia and princess. I challenge the author to dig deep and create a better verse. I love where you are taking it but lacks memorable experience with some more work it can be great keep up!

This story pulls you in from the get go. I love how descriptive it is. Feels more like I’m watching a movie than reading a story.