underworld hybrid in twilight

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zachycards

Don't leave an intentionally negative one-star comment on someone's story, just because you don't agree with their methods of presenting and writing it. You are now barred from making any further comments. And for those of you viewers, who want to read this deceitful toxic individuals story, don't bother, as he is not worth your time.

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KingBing96

Well Ive only really been given two chapters to work with. So i cant really give you more stars yet. So i want to ask whats with you wanting the allfather as the god? Like no judgment just curious. A way to make it better would probably cut down a little bit on the god monologue. They are supposed to be mysterious. The ability you asked for could be interesting if applied correctly. Like making it an ability like Bella’s sheild. Having the virus is good but he’d have to be exposed to both the vampire virus and the werewolf virus. Are you planning to let him be the Underworld Hybrid or Trying to make a new kind of Twilight Hybrid? Wishing to be reincarnated into twilight isnt bad if he had wished the worlds be mixed together. Trying to think of what else might be helpful advice to make this story idea even better. Other than those probably rework it a little and give as frequent updates as you can. I look forward to seeing how you make this story progress. Good luck Author and I’ll be waiting for more chapters to come out hopefully soon.