The Devil of One Piece

LV 4

TheFlagGuy

Writing Quality 3 - I have seen a lot worse and it is better than MTL. Sentences are way to long and some things don't even make sense. Stability of Updates 5 - Looks like you update every day. Good Job! Story Development 4 - Only read until chapter 4 so far so I will give you assume you do a decent job but don't really care to much about it so far. Character Design 1 - At chapter 4 the only thing I know for sure about anyone is that MC has red eyes. Idk what Stella looks like, idk what color hair MC has. Is the 20ft tall or 3ft tall? Who knows? Don't even know how old he is lol. Only reason i know what his adopted parents look like is because this is a FF. World Background 1 - 0 description of the surroundings and the only reason im not confused is that i have read OP. You cant assume that everyone has read OP (though i think everyone has) or any novel you write a FF about. Long story short, make your sentences so that they don't take up a whole paragraph. Add descriptions for characters and the environment.

LV 3

Sliarcrat

It's not bad. Of course, there are some issues, but most of them are not critical. I suggest you read them. The only annoying thing is grammar. For the author: There is a problem with the sentences. You write large single sentences that are uncomfortable to read. For example, the first sentence in chapter one: " An old man with a cape and shorts was walking through the forest to get over a hangover from heavy drinking from the previous night until he spotted a blood trail too small to be from an animal so he followed it until he found a blood corpse of a women tightly holding somthing." I rewrote the original. If you write: "An old man dressed up in a cape and shorts walked through the woods to get over the hangover from heavy drinking last night. Suddenly he noticed a blood trail, too small for an animal. The man, full of curiosity, decided to follow it, and ended up finding a bloody woman's corpse holding something tightly." It's much easier to read (although you can make it even better). Also, I suggest you install Grammarly. The quality of the text will increase.

LV 4

Yuri_yuri

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LV 13

Heavenly_Devil

I had thought about it, and this is the score I’m giving it- 3.4. There are a few reasons, and, surprisingly, grammar isn’t on the top... much better than others on this site for sure. Anyways the characters need a bit more ‘personification’... they seem dull? Idk, but yeah. They don’t have the same... spunk as the OGs. Anyways, if I wasn’t of help, I’m sorry.

LV 5

Majeh7

keep up the great work...................................................................................................................................................................

LV 14

CarrolStark

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