Sharingan in RWBY (Paused)

LV 4

Destroyer3000

Please don't forget about this I'm Yoshikage Kira. I’m 33 years old. My house is in the northeast section of Morioh, where all the villas are, and I am not married. I work as an employee for the Kame Yu department stores, and I get home every day by 8 PM at the latest. I don’t smoke, but I occasionally drink. I’m in bed by 11 PM, and make sure I get eight hours of sleep, no matter what. After having a glass of warm milk and doing about twenty minutes of stretches before going to bed, I usually have no problems sleeping until morning. Just like a baby, I wake up without any fatigue or stress in the morning. I was told there were no issues at my last check-up. I’m trying to explain that I’m a person who wishes to live a very quiet life. I take care not to trouble myself with any enemies, like winning and losing, that would cause me to lose sleep at night. That is how I deal with society, and I know that is what brings me happiness. Although, if I were to fight I wouldn’t lose to anyone.

LV 12

Dao_of_Melancholy

Great work so far I’m curious how the sharingan will be used since there are no ninjutsu to copy the character so far isn’t a soy boy so I’m happy I’m curious how this will develop so thanks for the work man

LV 4

jojojajahelp

First, the writing is kind of choppy wity the pace. The first few chapters are confusing and not much is explained. All we really know is that the MC was in a dark place and then suddenly gained the sharingan. The story is virtually nonexistent, the only thing really established is faunus discrimination thats kind of abandoned halfway through the story. The start is extremely fast, and if you skip a sentence you'd probably be a bit lost. I was actually confused on how the MC saw all of those bandit's memories until it was said later his semblance was seeing dead people's memories. The only thing good about the story is the fight scenes and even those seem a bit bland with a lack of story The MC, Faith, doesnt really have much of a character, hes mostly just a blank sheet. It says that he was a girl in his past life but it doesn't really elaborate beyond that. His personality is not well done, all we know is that he dislikes the tension between the Faunus and Humans, but thats honestly it. His romance with Velvet feels pretty forced as neither of them know virtually anything about eachother. All he really does is replace Fox in team CFVY and doesnt really ad much to the story. His relationship with others could definetly be elaborated on. The idea of the story is really good but horribly executed, the story is rushed, the MC is not explained, and the sharingan is kind of stupidly done.

LV 4

WutDelusional

I kinda forgot to do the tradition of an author writing a review so here it is.Just a guy writing a review. Yeah just a review that has nothing to do with the story. An unnoticcable review that will not impact the story at all. I swear. On my life.

LV 5

Immortal_Object

Its quite nice for now and I'm quite interested on how the story will progress so keep it up Author...XD..................................................