MHA: Murim Warrior (Reboot)

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Fushii

Okay story for a fanfic. You will know very little about his surroundings. You don't really develop any feelings for the characters because the they are too bland. Everything is circling around the mc and how strong he is getting which makes the story very bland and not very fun to read. I pushed through to chapter 20 and I wouldn't say I was enjoying it. It was intresting in the beginning but the author started to make the mc contradict everything he does, for an example he wants to become the symbol of peace but in order to do that you need to be strong. But the mc is holding back his power for some unknown reason which doesn't make sense to me. And it feels like the mc is alone all the time and his interaction is only because he wants something with that character. And when he starts UA you think it will be better because the characters are already made up for the author to use, but more wrong could I not be. He has 0 interactions with the other characters in his class. The first person he does have a monologue with is Mineta and it was only a forced comedy monologue that weren't even funny. The author needs to learn how to implement other characters to his story so it wont be so bland. And he really needs to stop contradict what the mc is trying to do. His goal is in his case to be the symbol of peace and to be that he needs power but he is holding back, like a lot. You know little to non about where he is. All we know is that he lives in a orphanage but the other children are only mentioned like once in the story. The writing quality is okay for a fanfic. And you should listen to your readers as they are there to support you and give you ideas.

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Shnh_Kusuma_3576

I like the murim system but unfortunately in the mha world which is full of heroes and villains who rely on quirks so it might be less challenging for murim sword types maybe in the world of one piece, naruto, or the world of magic and the sword will be interesting

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Anime_World_6808

I will not be hard on the Arthur as he is new you have very high potential as for the fanfic it is very rough the Arthur make a mistake here and there but always tries to improve his style, I hope you will continue to write more story as when the Arthur reach his full potential he will write an amazing story so don't get discouraged when you get a lot of criticism or many bad reviews as everyone must get through this stage. (ps: I will continue to read your fanfic even if it's trash so keep it up)

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Hugge2040

did you give give up why stop uploading

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Baldysalino

good Idea but the poor application of the said Idea. Some of the problems with the story are: grammar, short chapters (half or more of some of the chapters are just filled with skill explanations), unnatural flow of conversation, some logical issues such as becoming a vigilante with no combat experience as a relatively normal 10-year-old kid, so on so forth.

LV 4

Khan00

I really like what you are doing and how it is already different from most others when it comes to MHA and im looking forward to seeing how you do going forward

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God_of_hentai

romace?

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StarSword1

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FastestOfAllSperm

This story is great despite it's flaws. I know that the author is new but the story development could have been done better. Him going the hero route limits his action too much. If he is going down the hero route, he should embrace his martial arts and not pretend to have a quirk. It would be a more interesting story about the MC introducing the MHA world to Murim. Now the story is just like a clone of most MHA fanfic. But it's ok. You are new. It's better and easier to follow the cannon. I'm still gonna read it. I'm looking forward to the story.

LV 4

AugustusLurie

Honestly one of the best Settings in my opinion, Murim + Heavenly Demon is my favourite Martial Arts combination. I just dont like the seperate personas and the long list of martial arts on the otherwise beautiful and structured panel.

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Suzuha_Yuu

I really like this fanfic even though there are some spelling and grammar mistake it's still readable which is fine by me (I have MTL reading skill).I kinda like this idea of using murim abilities which is weak compare to wuxia/xianxia but still strong to have some advantage to quirks.i just hope you will fine a picture of what the heavenly demon sword looks like.

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Lucifer951

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FrancesSupreme

bom

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Saad_Yousuf

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arno00

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Tsuki_Rin

i like this book so much, i really hope i can read more chapter but i know good wine need time to ripe. yeah so i really hope author not dro this work

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AStrAl_Soul

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