/ Anime & Comics / May I see your panties hohoho
May I see your panties hohoho
Tác giả: master1983
Không đủ số lượng người đọc
Đã đọc Trong thư viện Thêm vào thư viện
Tóm tắt
I have eat Yomi Yomi No Mi & suddenly after awaken my power, I was reborn to unknown ninja world. My dad was called Hatake Sakumo & younger brother is Hatake Kakashi. By the way my name is Captain Brook From Rumbar Pirate. Hello Ladies may I see your panties hohoho
Parental Guidance Suggested
Thẻ
-- Xếp hạng
Quyền lực 
-- Đá
Quyền lực Bạn cũng có thể thích
1Các đánh giá
- Chất lượng bài viết
- Tính ổn định của các bản cập nhật
- Phát triển câu chuyện
- Thiết kế nhân vật
- Bối cảnh thế giới
Chia sẻ suy nghĩ của bạn với người khác
Viết đánh giá
- The writing quality is low, there are no spacing for paragraphs. -as it’s a new book I can’t really rate the update stability -The story is very interesting, what you’ve written so far seems more like an overview of your story, with just the first two chapters alone you could make 14 or so decent sized chapters if you go into detail( slice of live interactions etc). - The character design is fine, if you write a more detailed and complete story I would love to read the interactions between characters. -There are some inconsistencies in the world background but if you can explain them, like you did with Madaras reason for rebelling, then it will be Epic! Overall a great story board/overview of your story and I can’t wait to read a more detailed and comprehensive version of it. Keep up the Great work, thank you for sharing your story with us.