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LEEK THE SAIYAJIN
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Carl was 19 years old he was very unlucky that day his girlfriend left him and he was fired from work a cat scratched him while he was walking home and when he kicked the cat away he died because he was struck by lightning on a sunny day, he met a god and he granted 5 wishes ……….
Carl: my first wish is I want to go to drug ball
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This is my first time writing a novel I hope you will forgive my mistakes and help me improve and I am not an English speaker I hope you understand it thanks
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dude...pls fix the structure atleast, its hard to read.....the grammar is messed upto but I suppose english aint your main lang so try to improve but damn man the structure is all ****ed up...couldnt understand ****....ex: did the ex-bestfriend sleep with MC's mom or is it vise versa?, couldn't understand what happened there.....point is, try atleast fix the grammer
this is a really good story keep up the good work plz dont drop or hiatus i want to keep reading this. ................................................
Thanks for the comments and advice, they will help me to better develop this novel and my skills. since this is my first time writing a novel and it is part of a school project, but I would like my novel to become interesting and polish it over time and its advice, I don't speak English my English classes will start next year… thanks for your comprehension