Jaune Arc SI in the Multiverse (RWBY)

LV 4

RaulXD

no lo leo y ya tengo altas expectativas, solo espero que no sea de eso dónde el MC está roticimo. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 14

bigpollo

You get thrown into the story and nothing gets explained. It seems like its based on some random CYOA, but there is no explanation for that either. The story feels plastic at best and holliw at worst. I hope the author sees this and makes some changes because it seems lazy and sad compared to his other Work.

LV 13

Dextrous

The story was pretty good then you started making all tbe girls bi for some reason and it ruined it I guess give it a shot if you like that stuff but they even do it when hes not there and that feels like ntr

LV 4

Rindan

Honestly, at first I wanted to put a unit because of broken expectations in chapter 8. But then I thought about it and decided to be more objective in my assessment. The story itself is good. High level text. Not the linearity of the plot, which sometimes suffers from many fanfics. An attempt to reveal the identity of the characters. All this is a plus. There is only one minus, that in Chapter 8 the moral compass of the character is too overturned. Not what I can accept. in fact, one point is reduced precisely because of a sharp change, even 7 chapters are read about one, and from 8 about the other. Thanks for the story anyway.

LV 4

hiko410

you get thrown in the story without any idea about his power or whats happening , the story was editted and some paragraphs dosent make sense . chapter comments confuse you cause they are all the old version and talking about something not in the chapter the story needs a rewrite or a chapter with the mc powers atleast stopped reading at chapter 11

LV 5

Zero_619

Dude first of all you should give some kind of intro and atleast basic info about his powers before starting the story. Now the idea is a good one and the MC is not bad either but in trying to make it realistic you are just making him look angsty and emo brood as well sometimes. Though still quite a good read and will be waiting to see which worlds would he travel in the future.

LV 3

ToonDragonable

My ratings should say enough. Story was interesting for the first 30-50 Chapters. But became alot worse the further I read this Story, would have finished the Story to if it would have been finished here. But the Paywall showed its ugly Head. So read this Story if you like SI with CYOA.

LV 6

CalvinTheLeecher

Spanish Review. En lo general es un fic decente de Waifu catalogue con problemas de caracterización y un MC que no puede aceptar sus propias decisiones buscando justificarse y si no has leido ninguno esta más o menos para empezar a leer este tipo de fic. Primero que nada para los que no saben cuales son los poderes del MC o porque el autor no lo pone en un capitulo al inicio es porque esta usando el "Waifu Catalogue" se puede decir que es un CYOA largo, tu trabajo es conseguir o esclavizar waifus con el metodo que elegiste (hay como 6 hasta la ultima actualización que leí), donde los mundos de anime, juegos y libros estan calificados de 1-10 según la dificultad para sobrevivir en esos mundos, despues de eso le dan un presupuesto para gastar en poderes y habilidades, incluso waifus de otras obras y puedes obtener más al vender las waifus que no quieras. RWBY es considerado un mundo de Tier 6 o 7 en el Waifu catalogue, no muy bajo ni muy alto, sin embargo las habilidades y poderes estan hechas para que sobrevivan en mundos de tier 10 como W40k/Marvel 616/DC (especifican cual pero se me olvido)/Supernatural por lo que es muy facil abusar de ellas en RWBY ya que las amenazas más fuertes del mundo no te cazaran y el mayor problema seria juntar waifus para vender hasta alcanzar el dispositivo para ir a otros mundos o la waifu que pueda hacerlo. Esta es una de las razones por las que se puede iniciar en RWBY si planean hacer multicross ya que no tiene que gastar puntos en muchas protecciones conceptuales de otros mundos de tier 7+. El autor queria ser original al hacer que el MC no sea un completo bastardo esclavizando gente a diestra y siniestra pero falla al plantearlo y termina siendo otro fic más con un protagonista que se niega a usar su poder correctamente por dilemas morales que debio plantearse antes de firmar el contrato y no despues. Más adelante se siente hipocrita al vender a ciertos villanos por ser villanos pero quedarse con otro por ser util cuando los primeros eran incluso más utiles lo que llevo al hiatus que tuvo el fanfic en el capitulo 68.

LV 14

WarlockMagus

Its really good keep up the good work please don't drop it like your other fanfic which was really good as well................................

LV 11

Demiurge_Ohara

Writing- 4 star Story D- 2 Character- 2 update- 4 background- 4 Mmm... Everything is decent, but everything goes downhill when the salem arc is approaching. grammar, plot, execution and characteristics. MC:Jaune is a naive, reckless and gullible man that convinces himself that he does this and that for the benefit of Remnant. as the chapters release, it was shown that he's slowly becoming Even more reckless, hypocritical. Double standards and all. He broke my expectations for the worst and cause a the death of most populations. also he brainwashed his waifus, and executed them poorly at that. ( Salem arc and the unexpected smex with Raven and Yang. and many more) the quality of plot declines and I stopped reading before he'd traveled in another world.

LV 4

GreedAF

Story is good and had potential, good grammar too, but everything was ruined for me the moment he 'sold' waifus If you don't have a problem with something like that then go on and read Oh and MC is a HUGE hypocrite, be warned

LV 4

Commonnerfer

It took me a minute to figure out what was going on and i kinda wasnt okay with it. then i clicked on the authors name.... I reconized every fanfic youve written cause i read them all. although there are somethings im not okay with we are different people and its your story. Youve got my support. On a side note. Is it too much to ask you to finish the HP game of thrones fic?

LV 4

Yui_the_Kitsune

Its Fanfiction.net quality, thats all I have to say Noja. But I cant, because of the minimum amount of words is still not fulfilled. Noja...

LV 4

god_of_the_empty

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LV 14

DarkMoonRaven

this has been a great novel and i loved it since the beginning but my major point is will this be ever updated it would be really sad to see this novel go

LV 4

Bob_Uchiha_XD

The story causes a headache, it's confusing. 😵[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

LV 6

FAP_Master_

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LV 15

Roktah

a read "waifu" in the synopsis and its all i need to know, to know, that its not worth reading first time i had to fill in the required symbols to post.

LV 11

SalsitaHabanera2k

bruh, this fanfic is pretty good, keep it up author [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

LV 3

Generalkoinzell

ate agora esta otimo minha unica reclamação é o autor não ter dado sequer um resumo da situação dele so precisava de meio capitulo ou pelo menos ele poderia explicar uma coisa aqui ou ali no decorrer dos capitulos. PS: a resenha esta em portugues e assim vai ficar.