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Is it wrong to take a break in Danmachi?

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Alvar has finished his goal by protecting his world from its evil and succeeded in building a kingdom to help the races live in harmony. Still, after living for so long and working on his kingdom he wished to retire, so he picked his most trusted friends and taught them how to lead the kingdom and look after it in his stead. Afterward, Alvar with the help of his magic, items and elementals traveled to a different world to rest and complete his promise.

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A/N This is the first time I wrote a ff so any suggestions and criticism are welcome so that I can improve.

Also, I don't own anything but my OCs and I am mainly using Danmatchi as a template so I might change things like some monsters or characters and so on.

English isn't my first language so do correct some of the mistakes I make!

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Yellow_Duck_Toy

nice story, can't wait for more! :) (For the 50 words minimum):ddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd

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2yr
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Bound_by_gacha

I see potential in this fanfic and so far I like it and I hope you can continue your best in this fanfic and don’ t just suddenly discontinue it like many other good fanfic I read

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2yr
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W4ND3R1N6_R34D3R

Nice Novel, there's some potential to improve the story telling and nice introduction to the story (i will throw some random facts, There are 27 emotions: admiration, adoration, aesthetic appreciation, amusement, anger, anxiety, awe, awkwardness, boredom, calmness, confusion, craving, disgust, empathic pain, entrancement, excitement, fear, horror, interest, joy, nostalgia, relief, romance, sadness, satisfaction, sexual desire, surprise.)

2yr
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SujetoXVII

History implies that the mc is terrarium. This story at the moment is also not bad or good which is my opinion currently. It is a good idea to give him a mc mysteryso you can go well or go very badly as they develop

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2yr
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Reistlan

Good story, but many useless information. I wanna see story, not describe of all actions!!! Chapters so small. You write many words, but where's story?? Read 24 chpr in 10 minutes. Don't see point waiting next. Come back in few years, maybe can read ~ hour.

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2yr
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unknownless

Great fanfic i like it ||₩₩₩|||||||||||₩₩₩₩|||||||||||||||₩₩₩₩₩|||||||||||$///^5^/^/^/^/^/^/^/^/^/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&/&&/&///////&/&&&///////55/^////7/6$7/^$///^/7///^/^//6//$^/7/6/&/^$*^//^$&/

2yr
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WeDaRiPoTo

Good story and something new for me too. Hopefully more to come. ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

2yr
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Giruman

it's it's good story and I others enjoy it but the whole hiding identity thing is not my cup of tea gggjdbhebdhjdbsbskskdndnlendbdkssmdbsmsmsnsndkdnrnfbdndndf

2yr
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Arsene_Holmes

A good story, I still can't give a high rating, but these first 15 chapters were wonderful. I hope the quality continues. Looking forward to more chapters!

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2yr
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Logtagor

I’m so tired of this hide and seek, why are the authors trying to make the main character hide, but at the same time deliberately drawing attention to them, it’s annoying because it’s useless, you don’t have to tell everyone that you’re from another world, why not show that you’re a powerful person and join the family of a reliable god, and not hide behind a mask, attracting the attention of all the gods, why even have a mask when no one knows you anyway, it’s simply unbearable

11mth
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krokrok007

please get back.........................................................

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1yr
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The_man_The_myth

Dropped? ??????????????????????????????????

1yr
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Benghazier

Good story like where this is going, it has some flaws but over all 10/10

2yr
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Pro_pain

Good story so far Ddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd

2yr
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