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The normal thing in these fanfics would be to kill the MC or magically send him to a few days, months or a few years before canon with a system, right? Well, here it's screwed, in this one the MC, we kidnap him and send him to the Great War or the war of the three factions, that's right, this time the MC will be 3,000 years before canon and will not have a system (it fucks me up that mess), nor desires (no shit about having Goku's powers or infinite energy, or any other shit), he will have a power, it's obvious, but it will be a matter for them to find out.
Notice that this is my first fanfic, also I don't know English, so I would appreciate it if you could help me, if I forget something or something that doesn't make sense, I would appreciate your comments
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This is an amazing story. But I have to say, Author you need to edit your chapters before uploading them. The chapters are a little unreadable.
stories good the concept and the powers are also good but I have a single problem why is the main characters and Demons so over powered while the Angel Army looks like chumps you do know that angels Are technical is stronger than Demons because of attribute advantage but it feels like mc is fighting the whole Demons by himself and true form or something you need to super devils the only Super devils were Sircechz, Beelzebub, and Revizeum ( sorry if I buchered their names)
Es una buena historia, espero ver más del desarrollo del personaje y su papel en el mundo ,porque debo de escribir un texto tan largo para las reseñas?, webnovel se pasa a veces
Great story, has a really interesting concept. but needs work on the writings structure, it is a bit all over the place at times and can make it annoying to read. (constantly switching the prospective, different fonts and and inconsistent structure of the paragraphs) Overall enjoyable to read and can't wait for more chapters, keep up the good work.
First time I’ve seen this concept done this way and it’s really interesting. Maybe some constructive criticism for your writing I would recommend that you remove the separate font and simply either write something from first person perspective or write 3 person but not after the next sentence like for example him saying something “ “ then decribing what he’s thinking from his perspective. In the prologue you described him from a 3 person perspective as a possum but instead it would have been better after your quotation from his conversation you should have said. -I felt like a possum in the dark with a flashlight directed at me- instead of -the teenager look like a possum with the flashlight directed at it- when you want to do 3rd person perspective seperate it from the paragraph. Maybe this helps if Not all good.
So far I've read 11 chapters and I really liked the concept of your novel, how the main character gets stronger and takes on crazier forms, and that's not even starting with the DXD canon Take your 5 stars (I liked the Dinosaur King reference)