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After dying by truck our mc is reincarnated into the world of harry potter as a punny house elve watch as he grows and overcomes his fate and show the world what elves are truly capable of.
(i don't own harry, potter)
(the first few chapters have some run on sentences i have not yet fixed then but will please bear with them for now)
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Just here to tell you to fix the title. It's " An Elf's " not " An Elves "...'Elves' is the word for more than one elf..which contradicts the 'an' you have right before it. Make sure the grammar of your TITLE is correct at least..though it was actually a warning for what came inside..
The punctuation is terrible. Each paragraph is just one huge run on sentence. It causes the narration of the MC to come across as raving lunacy. You can't help but imagine the narrator is breathless at the end of each paragraph.
Yeah so this fic is a dumpster fire, and basically complete and utter garbage. Unfortunately it almosr comes across like the author was intentionally trolling the readers with the amount of typos and god awful grammar that filled every chapter. Author somehow managed to misspell every single word or name of any important character. Sentences make little to no sense and the overall plot is a complete nightmare. At one point he’s sacrificing children, at another he’s making plans to make the marauders friends (for what reason i still dont know), only to then start a house war in Hogwarts? All to serve as a distraction so he can get a real elf body only to immediately openly declare war on wizards. All of this is done with ”increased intelligence” from Ravenclaw’s Diadem. Unfortunately the maximum IQ of a character in a book is the authors, and in this case the author is a mentally handicapped jackalope. This was more of a fever dream than an actual fanfic and honestly I wish I never read this pile of garbage
Please continue this story! Pretty please! I truly enyoy reading about an underdog clawing his way up the ladder and creating something new and exiting.
The only plus is that it doesnt follows the harry Potters story so its not repetetive, but... . Author, is taking out too much BS for my taste, he doesnt even care and think about it, he just makes something out of nowhere and writes as if its normal. MCs growth is too fast, in my opinion, and everyone there is just too weak compared to MCs growth, and this will probably in my opinion lead to Nerfing the MC sooner then later as author will get this way fast to end of the story. All in all this is another story where the MC is just too OP too fast.
This probably one of the better fanfics I've read so far it has a great concept it's writing is some of the best I've seen in these website although there are some mistakes here and there grammar wise, but overall I'd say its one the better HP fanfics out there, Highly recommended
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you deserve 4 simply for house elves FF I've been trying to find these kind of ffs I will update later after reading it hope it will be worth reading
Quite a bit of run-on sentences, but the storyline is pretty good so far. That, and you don't find many good house-elf fics like this one......
Even thought the ending felt a bit too rushed, but it was still a very good book. Maybe the writing quality could be better, but the idea was great, and the author got better till the end of the book. Would give it full stars of not for the writing quality at the beggining.
the Grammer is horrible and stays that way till chapter 26 i read that much before dropping mc is completely and absolutely busted already and the author is a newbie because the characters are extremely one dimensional they have basically no personality author doesn't go into much details author is like mc killed a dragon after making it fall asleep and then he went and caused chaos in Hogwarts and killed dumbledores phonix in the chaos and he basically get the last ingredient from his dream ..... also he declares a war ans after that author says he is gonna make the mc more kind and stuff not killing and else like bruh where is the logic ?
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Pure trash fanfiction. Instead of writing a character he just explains at you like he is the protagonist telling you his life's story. The grammar, spelling and punctuation is terrible. This writer also likes to use stupid phrases like 'well lets just say' for no reason in a useless context. The characters and their dialogue is about as flat and uninteresting as a plank of rotten wood. At no point do you relate to or feel any sort of interest in the story nor the protagonist. 1/5 Stars, don't read.
This has been the worst fanfic i have seen so far. Nothing making this interesting . Everytime the Author forgets to inspect his chapter for gramma errors. The story is just thrown into it like it's no big deal.
Grammar is appalling, ideas ar good, story development is very fast. As far as world background, it is just Harry Potter, and for character design the MC is a bit plain and it is hard to get an understanding of his character with the bad grammar.
“Sigh!”Disappointing. Another self indulgence in violence for the sake of power killing 11 year olds is a poor excuse. So many fanfics that completely go off the rails with very little purpose makes me understand the psychology of such works like the “Lord of the Flies” book and of what kind of people some are when left with just a little bit of power over others, fictional or not. Self Explanatory but dropped…
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Looks interesting so far. Never read about a house elf fic. Looks interesting so far. Never read about a house elf fic.Looks interesting so far. Never read about a house elf fic.
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You gotta learn punctuation man. You literally write a whole paragraph without a single dot to seperate the sentences. Let me give you an example. You wrote: „...then I knew what it was missing me without hesitation i started to dance with it...“ when it should be: „...then I knew what it was missing. Me. Without hesitation I started to dance with it...“. There is stuff like this in literally every paragraph. You try to go around it by adding an "and" every now and then but that just makes the sentences uncomfortably long and awkward to read.