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Dead/Lost: The Knights of Frozen Sea
4.83 (12 số lượng người đọc)
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Ishizaki Haruhisa is a Holy Elf who was born in Northlandia, a heavenly land that is blessed by the Gods Themselves. Born to a loving family that came from a lineage of heroes, blessed with good and loyal friends and servants, and moreover, a lover who loved him with every ounce of her heart.
...He is destined for greatness, the path of heroes, and a path that he turned away from. He ran away from his own fate that is already set by The Gods, and he shall learn that fate is not something that anyone could ran away from….
…Enraged by his insolence, The Gods punished him by gambling away the very thing that he holds dear, his destiny, with a game of dices.
One by one, everything he values and loves slip away from his grasp, his trusted friends, his loyal companion, his loving family and finally, his dearly beloved. Having lost everything, he had lost himself in the “Eternal Black Flame”, paying for every sins he had ever committed.
…It is at this point that Ishizaki Haruhisa finally realizes, “I was wrong”.
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Your work is overall nice. The chemistry of your character and his family are momentarily great, and the theme about the prologue or prelude part talks about disappointment within the world. For the actual review, the dialogue needs to limit it since it's "getting off" for some reason, and some bit of narration should meet its balance as your work is similar to the drama script although your writing is decent. I look forward for your potential, but for now, keep writing. You're getting there to improve as it finest.
Welcome to Dead/Lost World where violence and rape is a common sense for human to conquer other races and "peaceful" world is just a fleeting dream in this world! I invite you, all readers of Japanese-based novels (LN) and players of "certain tabletop game" to join in my world and sink inside it! I, as The Maker can promise you a long chapter with great details unlike normal novels when the MC got reincarnated into a world where Demon Lord, Evil Lord, Evil God, or Evil Hero is just the stupid, useless main antagonist and can be defeated by such a normal guy or girl with lot of cheat skills from useless Gods who aren't omnipotent until they can't defeat their own nemesis by themselves! If you are bored with that kind of story, as well as "harem" tag or a "hero" (plus a hero who assists other characters secretly) character who always be praised by their weak friends and useless waifus, come and sink yourself in this hell, pleasured by the Lust Demon Gods' hands while your dices are "played" by them! "Remember, the world is evil and once you believed in someone, you have lost in this never-ending game..."
This is a very unique novel. The pros are that the story development is excellent. You see the story unfolding in sequences. The dialogues are cute and hilarious. You also feel like you are getting close to the characters. Their family and worlds are described without tiring the readers. Their world is super interesting. The interactions between the characters are well described. The off part is the language but it is perhaps because it is put together by non native speakers who haven't become best in English yet. But if you can overlook that part the stroy is a worthwhile read. Also the Japanese mixed in it is very appealing to me. Ganbatte! Author samas!
Hi! I think the relationship between Haru and Ayumi are cute :) The dynamic of the relationship between the characters are cute and I like how Haru’s not just teamed up with all women crew like some RPG/Adventure type stories ♥️. If you flesh out more of the characters and let their differences shine through, the friendships would be even more interesting ♥️ The story might need some proof reading/editor to fully grasp how you want your readers to feel when writing the story (which is totally fine. I have thesaurus and google in my aid every time I write). Also, feel free to take my next words with a grain of salt because some readers may prefer to get lost in the world created and the relationship dynamics generated from the world. I feel that the main character has unclear goal for himself, to which that drives the plot. This is something I always ask myself whenever I write specific scenes :))
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So far, so good. There is an anime-ish feel as I read the chapters. I could imagine it. Concept and flow is there. Pacing is good as well. Characters are also dynamic. I would advice to proofread and edit a bit, add few descriptions here and there so the transitions wouldn’t be rough. Overall, it’s good, and would be a must read. Keep up to good work!
Someone suggested me this novel to read as my second novel here in Webnovel and it turned out great. I am not good in reviewing things but I guess these 5 stars can tell you how I feel about your novel. By the waayyy... Haru is mah fave character.
Hello there! So, I stopped at ch21 to give a review but Webnovel won’t allow me to post it, so I scrolled all the way up to ch32. Anyways, your book is a great catch! I love how the story progresses and I love the characters as well. It feels like I’m one of the characters or I am inside an RPG game. You have nice long chapters and stable updates (how can you be so diligent? xD). I read some grammatical errors but I think it’s only minor since I am also not the best in grammar xD but yeah, overall your novel is great and I wish I have friends who reads in Webnovel so I can recommend them this book. Keep up the good work!
Your writing quality is good, there are only few mistakes there and there. Also, please refrain from using past tense and alike too much, since it's a bit "action killing" for me. Although, I know you are telling the MC's past before he died. Mmm...your novel it's kinda long, more than 2k words I presume? I like it but please divide your long paragraphs into two or three, so it won't confuse the readers or make them bored. Stability of updates...good! I like this novel updated every day, so it's not leave a "hang cliff" on my neck. Your story development is also good, it's nice and not "forced" like a flow of quick river. Your description on each of the characters is also extremely good. I can know their personality and "alignment", for example like Tim who acts like kid, etc... World Background I love how you describe Northlandia, as well as few places in your world. I can grasp what those places look like really well. Overall this novel is good for reading! Especially you, who loves DND and game-like fantasy story and not boring like "isekai harem" genre who walks in front of us everyday, although this story is really complex in several points. Dear author, keep up your good work!
First of all, I love the story with elves in them. The attention to the details in this story is very good. The way it's progressing and the way of presentation is very interesting. Really great work.
Well I can say that the story is keeping me hooked in the novel and the character interaction are fleshed out in a good way. Hope you give us more chapter Author!!!!!!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
I assume that English is your second language? With some spit and polish, this story will shine. Everyone needs an editor but I understand that few of us can 'afford' one. I know I can't... Cheers and good fortune!