Danmachi: The Elemental Swordsman

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DaoistKy4CgX

I'm sorry author but seriously? I can understand the updating stability but the others.. I can't rate higher than 3 stars.. I can assume that you are a new author right? So here's some criticism about your story. For the writing quality is decent however you rushed a lot of things in the chapters.. Because of that the writing quality was lowered to 3. the story development is also pretty bad.. only because you seemed to cram a lot of things and didn't bother to spread it out to multiple chapters.. It is also because you didn't even bother to try to write what he experienced in the dungeon.. Due to that it just feels like we're viewing nobody except Loki.. Because of that I had lower it to 2.. the character design also has some issues.. Like how his personality changed suddenly.. And because we haven't experienced his point of view it just feels like his character is so bland... because we haven't seen his weaknesses, troubles, backstory, and strengths.. so I rated it a 3. for the updating stability I'll rate it as 4 because it's still new so meh.. and for the world background.. I'm sorry but it's 2 stars for me... Because there's so many details you haven't given a explanation.. Like how did he went to danmachi? Why does Loki want him so bad? What was his POV in the dungeon etc...

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Karma_T3000

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0DarkWolf0

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