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4.43 (14 số lượng người đọc)
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"Beast Forge? What the hell is that?"
He thought while walking out of the alley. The streets were almost empty, with only the homeless wandering around, picking up anything valuable that was dropped. He walked over to join them, still thinking he needed to do this to survive. But as he bent down, a black screen appeared in front of him, with white text displayed on it.
[Beast Forge system activated
User successfully registered
Scanning user... done
User has not awakened, cannot use Beast Forge.
Analyzing for possible solutions.... done
Mission: Run 10 km before 00:00
Reward: Force awakening
Failure: Loss of the Beast Forge system
Will you accept this mission: YES/NO]
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Viết đánh giáA novel with a good potential, but the way of writing lacks. It's like some Japanese manga or anime nowadays where the MC is naive/has anger issues/no character development/full of awkwardly portrayal. These are the list that I see it lacks: 1. Story development is not good. Too fast development. MC jumps from one scenario to the other that there are no breathing. 2. The awkwardly interaction of characters. I read and some of the characters are like (I am a mysterious one) vibe.
Straight from chapter 1, I saw immense potential in this book. And though there aren't many chapters yet, I can already foresee this book reaching the top! Good luck, author!
This story has potential. The writing could use work in terms of structure. The story has some holes in it and it progresses a little too quickly.. I am enjoying he story, but if the author can take their time and develop the details better it would be top tier!
Its a good novel but once you get past the free chapters the grammar dips a little. The mc has anger issues and lashes out at everyone and everything which gets kinda annoying
ohh, not bad, there are issues but i am still enjoying it, i can see that the author is slowly improving with each chapter which is nice to see.
the story is really good, i do have to admit that the writing quality is not the best but and the characters are not described well but other than that, i love it so much.
Tác giả Mysticscaler
Author here. just want to point out that my novel has many issues but i plan to keep improving. if you see any area that i could do better, feel free to tell me, either here or in my discord linked in the synopsis.