A Viltrumite in MHA (My Hero/Boku no My hero Academia ff) (OC)

LV 4

The_man_The_myth

This is really good. It written really well and very cohesive. That introduction and back story were dark but really cool how you showcased the world.

LV 1

Angor

Writing quality: 4/5; good grammar, but many of the paragraphs are fused together. Update stability: 4/5; we only have 4 chapters, so there's not much to say. Story development: 3/5; the MC's backstory is confusing, basically he's a college student who died in some way that isn't explained properly, he simply got shot 4 times without any kind of antecedent that motivated the occurrence and died because he lost too much blood. Character design: 1/5; the MC is someone who was born and raised in a place with apparently high crime rates and precarious financial conditions, he was a college student who was seeking a degree in a medical field with only 2 years left to complete his training taking into account that it is a medical field and that the initial age range of a college student is approximately 19 to 20 years old and there were 2 years left to complete the training he should be around 25 and 26 years old together with the 12 years of memory of his second life where he experienced a model of an abusive family he should at least have the mentality of someone who is 37 years old which clearly does not match the MC's naive way of thinking, even if he is naturally a good person and is forced to act as a hero due to the "hero's curse" he should not think in such a naive way he would be more focused on a neutral-good character than this character of an elementary school child with a suicidal hero complex, I do not mean to say that helping people is a bad thing, but he should not stop doing it what he is doing to save all the people in his field of vision or act as if he owes an incalculable debt to all the people he knows, of course he has to be cautious and polite to maintain an accessible image for the public and his colleagues, but he doesn't need to act as if he depends on these people to stay alive. World context: 4/5; it's good to have a more realistic and direct background than the constant antics and stupid actions shown by the characters in the original work.

LV 3

Wiz_Werd

5/5 Fanfic you should read! (definitely not biased) I bet the author has 2 tortillas and at least 48 cents. On a real note though I genuinely think its pretty good and I hope people enjoy it. :)