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Do not give Up author .You have something good here and the last fanfic too just try to follow your own history and do not the history of a reader i mean anyone can comment about any things but just keep in your line.
This novel is doomed the first one was better but this the author destroyed her because he listens to much from the readers if keep like this this novel will not go anywhere the first when I read it I complete all chapters and I wished for more but this man six chapters and I am bored.
Writing quality is quite good and update stability is fine too so about story development it is quite interesting and enjoyable well hope author will maintain this rating
hey author you've made great changes here in current story.... although the process of making PC, AI and OS is still fast but I guess it's with in reasonable range please don't make him king of the world before story starts I mean even Tony stark got started for real after he suffered some setbacks.... which was the real motivation for him I suggest that you give him reason for his drive that's what all human need to grow either good or bad otherwise if there's no drive no one will work 🤷🏻♂️ also make him original villains that are solely focus on our mc instead of mc going around messing with other heros villain, I mean I hope that you're mc is not a nanny or attention seeker that just messes with every villain just for sake of messing 😅 it's humanly tiring to do so keeping track of every bad guy like even tony with world most powerful ai and shield being most powerful organization don't just jumps around everywhere because it's not feasible also you can grow along with time like no need to introduce nano bots before time, heres the thing Howard stark was genius but he was limited by his time period which is factual thing.... 😁
I read your novel before you rewrote it and stopped because it was so fast-paced with technology, so I hope I don't make the same mistake. You have a technological advancement that I don't have, and people are ready for it. That was in 2004. The magic of technology is to improve on what's gone before and make something new. At a good pace. that make as feel the happines that mc have when he finish. by the way am gonna read the rewrite again because i realy love your write and story . good luck
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Really did a good job correcting does grammar 💯 I just hope your release rate won't drop. #KeepUpTheGoodWork 👏 .....................................................HO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RB
This rewrite in terms of plot development and development of secondary characters is better, but when we talk about the development of MC is much worse than the original story, in this rewrite lacks common sense and intelligence, he became a generic protagonist, when the charm that this MC had in the previous story was his prudence in using the Omnitrix to save others and did not use it as blatantly as in this version and most importantly showed a certain selfishness that made it more realistic. One of the best hits of the previous version was how the MC created a technology company, in that world there are many geniuses so it would not be strange that the MC would pass for one of them and also with gray matter would be in the top of the most intelligent of the Marvel universe, perhaps only one or 2 would be above him as Reed Richards.
Do not give Up author .You have something good here and the last fanfic too just try to follow your own history and do not the history of a reader i mean anyone can comment about any things but just keep in your line.
This novel is doomed the first one was better but this the author destroyed her because he listens to much from the readers if keep like this this novel will not go anywhere the first when I read it I complete all chapters and I wished for more but this man six chapters and I am bored.
Writing quality is quite good and update stability is fine too so about story development it is quite interesting and enjoyable well hope author will maintain this rating
hey author you've made great changes here in current story.... although the process of making PC, AI and OS is still fast but I guess it's with in reasonable range please don't make him king of the world before story starts I mean even Tony stark got started for real after he suffered some setbacks.... which was the real motivation for him I suggest that you give him reason for his drive that's what all human need to grow either good or bad otherwise if there's no drive no one will work 🤷🏻♂️ also make him original villains that are solely focus on our mc instead of mc going around messing with other heros villain, I mean I hope that you're mc is not a nanny or attention seeker that just messes with every villain just for sake of messing 😅 it's humanly tiring to do so keeping track of every bad guy like even tony with world most powerful ai and shield being most powerful organization don't just jumps around everywhere because it's not feasible also you can grow along with time like no need to introduce nano bots before time, heres the thing Howard stark was genius but he was limited by his time period which is factual thing.... 😁
I read your novel before you rewrote it and stopped because it was so fast-paced with technology, so I hope I don't make the same mistake. You have a technological advancement that I don't have, and people are ready for it. That was in 2004. The magic of technology is to improve on what's gone before and make something new. At a good pace. that make as feel the happines that mc have when he finish. by the way am gonna read the rewrite again because i realy love your write and story . good luck
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Really did a good job correcting does grammar 💯 I just hope your release rate won't drop. #KeepUpTheGoodWork 👏 .....................................................HO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RBHO3WPF44UYL665RB
This rewrite in terms of plot development and development of secondary characters is better, but when we talk about the development of MC is much worse than the original story, in this rewrite lacks common sense and intelligence, he became a generic protagonist, when the charm that this MC had in the previous story was his prudence in using the Omnitrix to save others and did not use it as blatantly as in this version and most importantly showed a certain selfishness that made it more realistic. One of the best hits of the previous version was how the MC created a technology company, in that world there are many geniuses so it would not be strange that the MC would pass for one of them and also with gray matter would be in the top of the most intelligent of the Marvel universe, perhaps only one or 2 would be above him as Reed Richards.