Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra

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Darkness_Enjoyer

Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.

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radioactive_jig0l0

man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories

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thePRIEST

Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.

The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.

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Dieudonner_17

Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you

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Lazy_Pen_Master

five star from me, cuz why not. i enjoyed both of authors previous works. all the best for this book also.

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Anonymous_Boiii_69

Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach

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Alikareem_Fatemi

I may be biased due to reading the author other works (Hunter Academy: Revenge of the Weakest) This is very good start. Still too early to give my full thoughts of the story but from knowing the author previous work I know I'm going to love this story. One thing I love what the author does is he takes his time with the main character development and power level. I am so tired of reading a op main character who barley worked hard to obtain their power. shattered innocents we see the mc struggle and I am so excited to see how he will prevail and get back at everyone who wronged him. Maybe I'm just odd but I like seeing a main character who we see starts at the bottom and crawl their way to the top. Overall, I'm quite excited to see how this story will unravel. i do hope the author will have the main character have guy friends (I do not mean Bl lol) Typically with stories with harems the mc only surrounded by women. They don't have guy friends if they do it's like comedy relief. I hope I explain that well like I want the mc having his own group his bros. I hope explained what I thought well this was my first time writing a review so if I made a mistake cut me some slack.

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vainINheaven

The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.

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Rahul_Verma_9515

Too much rubbish info. So wastage of time is one issue. But secondly, the story was good at start but the mc progression just went from extremely low to extremely high so fast that the rhythm of whole story was ruined. I feel very disappointed because of it. Thirdly after all this the mc is kind even though he says he is not but he sure acts like a saint (I dont know if I should be happy or sad for it) . Truely a miracle there. Lastly he is becoming a idiot as the story is progressing. I liked the story far better before that cat came into his life(unnecessary extra) . I am at 160 ch now. And I hope it will get better ahead.

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CloudSmoke

This is fucking horrible OK so a couple main points here The author has a huge reiteration issue. They will say everything over and over and over again in every way, you can think of in the same fucking chapter. It honestly doesn't matter what the subject is just know that reading this story is signing up for reading the same paragraph over again written differently in the same chapter in almost every chapter. Now it's not always the same thing chapter chapter, tho so at least there is that 🤣 Another thing this story is incredibly slow like me personally, I can read an average of about 50 to 80 chapters in a day just casually depending how long the chapters are with this the moment I passed chapter 50 it became a massive slog like it's not that it's technically slow. It's just that things that most authors skip this guy feels like he needs to write everything about and that might be a good thing if the writing was good, but I genuinely can't tell if this wasn't just done by an AI or not this is terrible just awful No, I could say more, but nobody wants to read all that so I'm just gonna end it here. I've said my peace.

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Muhammad_Bayu_8532

The novel was initially good but to be honest the quality declined over time and the fillers were very numerous, such as repeating events that had already occurred, the intention was obviously to add words in order to have more premium chapters, but as previously reviewed, boring, a lot of plot armor, and the quality decreased due to the number of unnecessary fillers.

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SYED_AFAQ

author is there any type of Yuri or ntr in it I hope not

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Beyond_the_wall

I don't like the mc. Too much of an idiot.

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FrialExistence

Just an opinion after I read few chapters... the author uses purple proses a bit too much. The excessive descriptions are unnecessary and to the point of obsession. 🤢 It doesn't change at all. NOT. AT. ALL. More I read, more I get that. Overall story is good but the roundabout narration seems deliberate only to increase the number of words to reach the per chapter word quota and hence, individually the chapter lack substance. The world setting seems alright (though much wasn't revealed), the character design was likeable too, even the plot development was great. However, the purple proses are what make it shit for me. I know that only shows how dedicated the author is towards certain details but they really are unnecessary. Better to burn your brain cells on something else for efficient writing - that's what I want to say.

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Shuvro_Majumder

Bro, have you really given up on EROTIC RPG ??you took a new novel ,which you are going to update 1 chapter everyday . But you haven't updated a single chapter of erotic rpg for 6 month straight. Now you are treating it like middle child .

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Shinoa_69

Great story but vitaliana is pretty much useless except some moments

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Eldeel

320 chapters in, time for a review: First of all I love this book, I am really happy that I decided to endure on and read through this book. But before I start glazing, I have to give criticism. This is probably just me being soft but the first 30 chapters are difficult to read because they are just too realistic. What the mc goes through is just pure trauma and sadness. Its like Murphy law where everything that could go wrong happens. The mc feels pathetic. It just feel grating to read how the poor boy has to suffer. The fact that mc is transmigrated into the book but at the same time has no memories/ sealed memories is a bit new and confusing for me especially with "Extra" setting. I wont lie I was on the edge of giving up multiple times during there chapters but I do understand there are important for building the story. However I would have appreciated a disclaimer in the synopsis explaining or warning about this. Now to the good part: I always appreciate a smart anti-hero mc. The bipolar nature and resourcefulness are a nice blend. The interactions mc has with "Valeria" specially are very refreshing and helps the readers understand how the mc will interact with the rest of the world. The smile that hides 1000 secrets. I have to say the character developments of the side characters is well done. A lot of books just dump 5 sides characters at once and give some specific personality traits regarding them and that's it Which leads to some of the most boring characters which you hope to just die. But thankfully the author puts efforts to actually build these characters and makes them feel like real people. Currently the author is using multiple chapters of solo-interactions with the other characters to build familiarity which I am enjoying quite well. If there characters were just dumped into the academy arc the characters would have been much more boring.There is also a lot of forshadowing regarding future characters and this builds anticipation for future events. All in all I have to say the book is in a very good place at the moment and I hope this continues in the future.

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Xyneth

Read the whole thing, the pacing is good if you don’t have a TikTok brain like half the reviewers. The Mc slowly adapts like a human and once he overcomes his mental block it gets 1000x better. The emotions the Mc feels in the story aren’t too forced and the supporting characters are fleshed out enough as well. The main drawback is the fact that most of the females are super cliche, Fe: Crazy yandere Tsun tsun knight Childhood best friend who has always loved him And prob the Flmc of the original story after she finds the truth They aren’t very real feeling. I’d rather no romance than the stereotypical harem that will not progress and will just be used as filler in between plot points. Overall not bad ig. Has pontential to be amazing and could be someone’s favorite story.

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Zazm

I personally liked it people say MC isn't that good but he is fine for me it's still 100 percent better than those lame extra plots where they just go to academy no training nothing bullshit