Not so Lazy Nara: There are no evil acts that go unrewarded.

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Karfin2422

It’s seriously really good, def a top 10 fics for me

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_unknown_0

the book is good so far. and if you are going to drop this brook, please tell us. don't just silently drop it like others with no explanation.

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DaoistcaqwL5

Things I want to say about my fan fiction novel: The novel's name admittedly is not great, and the same goes for the summary and to this day, I have not figured out a good alternative. I initially chose them as placeholders that sounded distinct enough because of how different they looked which didn't basically describe what you are going to read, and I stuck with them until I could finally figure it out a better alternative.( would appreacite a suggestion.) Anyway, moving on, the story starts in the middle of the main character's life. As you can guess, his past is mostly left unknown, with each chapter hinting at, saying, or even explaining what happened during his earlier years. Moreover, as you all guessed from the summary, he is in Konoha, where the Anbu force will have a greater presence in this novel and will be much involved in his life and the chapters in general. It's best to read and discover what kind of person the main character is, but one thing I can say is that there will be times when you will question whether he is a hero or a villain. It is somewhat AU or at going to resembles an AU they are so many things that in left unexplored in the original where I need to fill it up based on my ideas to makes sense and presence of MC did change direction of the story. It basically applies to every naruto ff, I am just clarifying it. The cons of this novel, in my opinion, are that it becomes too informative at times and the fight scenes are relatively few and comparatively short, often ending in one chapter. Though I try my best to make them longer, like in chapter 25, where the fight scenes were written in around 1500-2000 words (a couple of hundred words were a bit informative and might feel out of place). Another con may not be too descriptive especially if the location you can just imagine by saying its name like Valley of the end etc. The update schedule is nonexistent as I write based on the idea I currently have for a chapter, the time it takes to proofread and choose better words with the help of ChatGPT/Claude (though I only began using the latter very recently), and the time I have left after finishing my daily study. So if the stars align, you will see new chapters every day. Otherwise, it might take weeks, especially if I am writing a chapter with fighting scenes. However, I assure you that, unlike before when I stopped updating because fight scenes discouraged me from writing, I will inform you in the last published chapter rather than ghosting you, like for the 14th time in a row… Anyway, I hope you enjoy the fan fiction novel and comment on it, as it gets boring when no one comments. Here is a little tidbit that you will understand after reading: don't expect the main character to have an overly antagonistic relationship/dynamic with the Konoha upper echelon, unlike most Konoha-born main characters. The timeline is set way before the birth of Naruto.

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Rational_madness

I really found it dull and boring. 9 chapters on, no introduction to the mc's goals/motives and the only background info is that he is a torturer. Several chapters where 1 chapter ends on him giving some opinion and statement and the next transitions immediately into something completely different, like his morning or a different POV. Like the chapter where danzo asks his opinion on wood release experiments, then he gives it, there is nothing after that, and new chapter is what he does in the morning. Next, you describe the same thing several times just for word count, and you waste several paragraphs on what he eats for breakfast but there is no actual progression of the story or description of what goes on around him. Overall, I feel like it is a waste of time, its like some snippet of smth or extra chapters after some novel ends, and even those have more description.

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Daoist_Lake

Writing Quality : I'am bad at grammar so i just read what i can read. Story Development : Good. i just love story with First Person View. I can know how what MC thinking and feel about his situation. Story is good, still slow-pace because MC already at War. atleast i don't have many time skip. Maybe what i can say cons in early chapter is : Too many monolog (but i just predict, MC still at dark side and don't open his heart), MC lack attachment with Character like Sandaime, Tsunade, Duy, Sakumo. Their dialog is too formal, don't feel like their are friend. But i know because MC is Anbu, and Nara Clan famous about efficient and don't involved unnecessary interaction. Atleast pros in this fanfic : MC cannot be Sudden Appear Hero/Hero Landing and Conflict don't solve because MC appear. Too many factor to accomplised his mission. But still briefly and Author need Buff his writing experience on this kind Conflict. Character Design : Still mystery to me. But atleast we know story MC start on Middle of His Life. so prepare to have many flashback. Maybe in future many problem MC Will appear from flashback. And i still don't know who Will solve this problem. Updating Stability : Dunno. World Background : this is what i can say excellent. What we know in Naruto About Second Shinobi War is brief and vague. Change PoV to another Character is good move. So we can know World Background from Change PoV Character and know situation from their perspective about Second Shinobi War, Relationship between Hidden Village/Clan, Politics Conflict between Upper Echelon Village and Head Clan. Overall. Good, and Satifiying Story for me. I already bored with Third Perspective Person (because we always know the situation all in control) and First Perspective Person always make me want read it, because i don't want MC become Omniscient dan Omnipresent to always know his situation (if he always know his situation, what Point to make the story? pick up girl? please give him suprise and don't all situation according to MC plan). I don't against Third Person PoV, every PoV has their advantage. First Perspective View : To know how character feeling and how character see the world through their perspective, it can be kind world or cruel world. Second Perspective View : its just for RPG/Otome Game. So reader can feels the Character talk to reader (i just know one fanfic who use this PoV, i just can say... its unsuccesfull. Because its really weird in Webnovel. and the author just drop the fanfic). Third Perspective View : Good for bigger Enviroment. its really good if you are strategist, you can see and cover all situation in large Scale. but minus in this view is we don't know Character Feels, because too vague. (Just see Chinese or Korean Novel, many MC from their story is Omnipresent if use this view). Thats all. Thanks to read my rant.