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I created my own system

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WSA 2024 ENTRY NOVEL----

My talent can be said above average but for my family I am useless. Six years after the incident that I caused I accidentally created a system.
Now I wonder if I will fail again....with my new power I will make sure my cute little older brother, sister and especially my Father will pay the price of creating a monster.... Me

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    Buay_Butler

    No harem=No read !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    WeavedSlave

    In summary, this is a story of a thirteen year old boy who created something (which I think is a system) in a secret library, and with the goal of becoming stronger using the system he created. Strengths of the story are simple-straightforward language, simplicity of author's tone and slightly meaningful story development. Weaknesses includes the misuse of punctuation marks, extremely slow pacing, and the lack of proper characterization. While reading it, I don't feel thrilled nor can I find strong suspense but nonetheless, it's readable. In my opinion, there are a lot of things to correct. Really. I recommend it to all youngsters around the world.

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    mo_86
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    I have read many books of the same genre, but i got to say that this one feels very new again. I love the world building and the cohesion of old and new. Looking forward to the next chapters!

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    LAZYHEAD

    And here is the author's shameless review, To start off I'll write the story's weaknesses. Honestly, this novel has so many grammatical errors I am thankful that many readers still take time to read it. I am thankful because the readers are kind enough to point out my mistakes. I would often read my novel to check, but somehow whenever I do my brain automatically corrects the errors, making me unable to see them since I read them correctly. The pacing is a bit slow and sometimes you can read the transition being wrong. I am working on it but thank you for still reading. The Main character is still a kid so please have patience with his decisions if they seem a bit inappropriate. He will improve but please don't stop commending for suggestions since I am considering listening to my reader's suggestion. That's all for now please do add more if I miss anything, thank you As for the strength please start reading and write them here.

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    Captain_Sadistic

    Only read chapters one to four at the moment I'm writing the review. I'll be honest It looks like the story has potential but it feels a little slow. A little better writing style and a faster pace should help boost the quality of your story. Keep it up. Good luck.

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    REFO
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    its messed up .... the Idea is great but the delivery is trashy ...

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    thehumanbeing

    Very bland concept. Once again, I don't give out many reviews but this one the authors gotta know his shortcomings. And personally I don't like harem so I'm sorry author. Was trying out new novels but this one was a bit lacking in world background. The story has potential.

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    Eman_x

    [img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=golden ticket]osssmmm dude

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    Martikus

    Premise was pretty great, but I had a very hard time reading it. The tense was not always correct, and it was pretty hard to read.

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    Kelvar10_

    Moment I saw the revenge theme, I signed straight up 👌🔥 Better be good, leaving a 5 star in case

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    SPPrincess

    I was actually drawn in by the title. I mean...that's pretty cool in itself, who wouldn't want to build their own system. Though I was confused as to why to needed to get stronger if we he created the system himself. But....Great job author!!! Thumbs up!

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    davinaaugust

    This book is cool and a new kind of genre for me

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    Forteller

    Character is likeable even though he's just a kid. I'm enjoying the setting so far and the story is fairly easy to read tbh, great work ❤️

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    JJ_Francis

    Ok! Starting from the synopsis I was captivated adding with the author's confidence the chapters are amazing and build up nice

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    FloxyBelle

    Ok. When I saw the title, I was like; 'That's a first' which actually intrigued me. Then I read a few chapters which was quite interesting. Although the mc is a child, but I guess I can work with that. But in total it's a nice plot and I'd love to see how it goes.

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    Ailiseu

    Alrighty! So I don't really like when mc is a child because they always act childish which they should be but this one is good because I can see potential on our mc and what's more he created his own system which most novels only show that a system would appear somehow but this time the mc created hiw own which is good for a change. I'm just excited for mc beating his siblings and showing them that they are wrong for mistreating him. (I'm only at chapter 4 by the way and I'm already excited) Please give it a try I know most people are tired of system novels but this one is decent I can definitely say so myself.

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    JJ_Francis

    Someone call for the best? This is it, everything and more

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    Otu_Harriet_4678

    This is my first time trying a system book and this got me hooked. interesting and the auxiliary made it easy to understand a few terms used. Thanks author

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    HeavenlyMike

    I can genuinely see the potential in this...🔥

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    AncientInk

    It's quite a nice story, only red till chapter 2. I do have a question though.Is it harem coz I'm not really a fan of it. But either way great job.

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