Demon Angel.

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KINGOFGOD

i must say i quite disappointed cause no Yandere

LV 4

Ironrooster36

Hello everyone, at this point in time, I'm currently at ch. 19. Let's start with the negatives that this novel suffers through, at least for now. Firstly, the story progresses too fast. There's little development, character-wise, although there's been hints that something more may show up, as the characters feel off, as if they aren't fleshed out. With the pacing that the novel's going at, I feel as if the Author will overlook details, backgrounds, character interactions, and of course, knowledge about the world, with how focused the Author seems on taking the MC to that Abyssal place. Secondly, we're missing out on context about a lot of things, as we haven't been told or shown how much time has passed, with only a passing comment from the MC about it being awhile since he's last showered. The Author also skipped from location to location, once again, seemingly hurried to push the protagonist forward. These are all of the negatives that I can think of at the moment, so onto the positives. Starting off with the first chapter, we see a rather unfortunately named antagonist, that honestly made me laugh for awhile. From what I can see right now, the Author knows how to make and properly use comedic situations. With the horror/dark atmosphere, the story amps up and handles spooky and terrifying aspects well. Lastly, Author, do not be afraid to slow down the pacing of the story, as it gives time to the characters to develop positive/negative relationships, and also gives us, the readers, a better sense of the world you created. I would also suggest that you ask other Authors about this, be they new writes, or used to it. And don't forget that you have manage the story well, as it'll bring in more viewers/money in the long run.

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Kaniu

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LV 13

TuzinhoTatu

I dropped this novel since, past a certain point, it didn't suit my taste anymore. Does it mean that it's a bad novel? Certainly not, although there are some problems here and there (and sometimes you can't really understand what's going on), I still think the idea behind and the characters are really great, so you should consider giving it a try