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ITS reads Like a Bad Chinese novel....forced plots... and false Charakter portrialel
The vocabulary is decent grammar too but the characters r and paceing is kinda garbage. I would give reasoning but just reading the first twenty chapters are explanation enough. Simply put this is NOT a progresive story just a power/interaction fantasy and I doubt that’s intentional.
nope... just nope.The start was good and I had hopes. You had to ruin the story by nerfing the MC and prolong the fights for 30-40 Chapters... Write a Dragon Ball fanfic where you can write 100 Chapter fighting scene however you like but in Ninja World where everything is about finishing it as fast as possible? No, just no.
The story became ridiculous very quickly, it's just the typical Chinese story of the protagonist who believes he owns the absolute truth and is just a mascot of the system.
the author has almost no knowledge of Naruto, the mc becomes another emo sasuke and there are many forced Chinese novel type plots If you are a big Naruto fan or don't like Chinese clichés or a dog who loves the system, this is not your story.
Read until he made B a broken record. He rhymes, he dos not preface each sentence with Fool, ya fool.
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Man, this was actually kinda good at the start, but the quality took a sharp drop when the author decided to have the MC return to Konoha. It was so poorly done and the clearly author couldn't think of a way to do so more naturally, because he had the MC randomly get attacked by the Pein. Sure, the MC could've just run away at any time, but now he's suddenly "too prideful" to retreat from an obviously superior opponent. (He ends up running away anyway.) Konoha is happy to take him back and treat his (near fatal) injuries and let him wander around the village, despite his murder of several village higher ups and Hyuga clan members. After all, he has information on the Akatsuki for them. Sure Konoha could just have him tortured or something, but, uh, reasons. And then the romance with Ino starts escalating, and I dropped the fic.
if you want to tell a story about Naruto anime then f****** tell the story about naruto not some f****** Chinese God
La historia prácticamente sigue a la original, hay muy pocos cambios y son nulos en relevancia, el personaje es plano, "terminator" tenía más carisma... También es muy ridícula su escala de poder, el personaje es inmensamente roto, pero lo nerfean constantemente para darle emoción, sin mencionar que es muy estúpido a veces, cuando puede hacer un cambio para mejor no lo hace, simplemente dice dos o tres palabras y se queda callado, lo peor de todo es que ni siquiera tiene sentido la historia, constantemente sale alguien a defenderlo, si no es el 3er Hokage es Katsuyu, su waifu Yamanaka o el mismísimo Daimo... Simplemente ridículo.
I really liked the concept, in which he shows that he does not want to be someone else's prisoner, however it is true that he is op, something that personally is not a problem but I think it should be stated beforehand, in general I like his personality that I feel is very calm (I have seen that others see it as hollow or flat but that is their opinion)
The only good thing about this story is the idea and premise. from the execution of it to the grammar thats heavily influenced by Chinese literature or Google translator. The worst part of this story though is the characters. they've been warped from their original versions, heavily influenced by other dumb fanfics, from the tropes to the way they speak. its the authors story but making half the characters just worse versions simply makes the story worse. Let's not start with the MC. Hes boring. doesn't really have emotions. doesn't like people. doesn't like things, doesn't like life. Nothing driving him except revenge which gets stale when he's so one dimensional. I know this is the only type of MC the author writes because Google translate can't translate emotions so i shouldn't of expected different. He's basically a God at this point too. got tired one because he was playing with his food for so long so thats just the author nerfing him when necessary. Its sad, I'd love to see another author give this story a try.
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Good idea. Bad execution, MC is basically the Hokages dog, at least up to chapter 36
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I don't understand, why such a low rating. I really like your work. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The concept of the story is good. The idea of a blind Hyuga is very original and this is the only good point of this story, everything else is done horribly wrong. There is a romance between the Mc and Ino and it's incredibly forced. The villains are just plain Chinese bad guys cliche. The author lacks a clear understanding of how the worlds of both Naruto and One Piece work. His use of observation haki is not wrong but very lacking. The Mc master the usage of storm release a combination of both thunder and wind release in just under three years. The Mc is ruthless with his enemy and doesn't hesitate to kill when necessary despite coming from our world and coming from a peaceful country and his character development was never shown. Despite using the Fujitora template the Mc only sharing trait between them is that they are blind. Obviously, Fujitora's power is used, but if it wasn't specified that he was using the Fujitora template I would not be able to tell at first. Worst of all Rock Lee is just mentioned in passing. He had almost no impact on the story until I stopped reading. At least there don't seem to be a lot of grammar mistakes, but English is not my birth language so I may be wrong. In short, it's a good idea and someone else should try to give the idea a chance in another story.
author keeps adding nonsense instead of just giving mc fujitora powers he goes after other bs power marks as for other problems with this fanfic other users alreay said it LoL not gonna repeat the whole pile of problems
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I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! Like there's no mistakes and the writing quality is just so good. I love the story so much. But if there's gonna be romance please don't make it forced or like idk how to explain it. btw i love how fast the updates are! ANYWAY please keep up the good work!!
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ITS reads Like a Bad Chinese novel....forced plots... and false Charakter portrialel
The vocabulary is decent grammar too but the characters r and paceing is kinda garbage. I would give reasoning but just reading the first twenty chapters are explanation enough. Simply put this is NOT a progresive story just a power/interaction fantasy and I doubt that’s intentional.
nope... just nope.The start was good and I had hopes. You had to ruin the story by nerfing the MC and prolong the fights for 30-40 Chapters... Write a Dragon Ball fanfic where you can write 100 Chapter fighting scene however you like but in Ninja World where everything is about finishing it as fast as possible? No, just no.
The story became ridiculous very quickly, it's just the typical Chinese story of the protagonist who believes he owns the absolute truth and is just a mascot of the system.
the author has almost no knowledge of Naruto, the mc becomes another emo sasuke and there are many forced Chinese novel type plots If you are a big Naruto fan or don't like Chinese clichés or a dog who loves the system, this is not your story.
Read until he made B a broken record. He rhymes, he dos not preface each sentence with Fool, ya fool.
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Man, this was actually kinda good at the start, but the quality took a sharp drop when the author decided to have the MC return to Konoha. It was so poorly done and the clearly author couldn't think of a way to do so more naturally, because he had the MC randomly get attacked by the Pein. Sure, the MC could've just run away at any time, but now he's suddenly "too prideful" to retreat from an obviously superior opponent. (He ends up running away anyway.) Konoha is happy to take him back and treat his (near fatal) injuries and let him wander around the village, despite his murder of several village higher ups and Hyuga clan members. After all, he has information on the Akatsuki for them. Sure Konoha could just have him tortured or something, but, uh, reasons. And then the romance with Ino starts escalating, and I dropped the fic.
if you want to tell a story about Naruto anime then f****** tell the story about naruto not some f****** Chinese God
La historia prácticamente sigue a la original, hay muy pocos cambios y son nulos en relevancia, el personaje es plano, "terminator" tenía más carisma... También es muy ridícula su escala de poder, el personaje es inmensamente roto, pero lo nerfean constantemente para darle emoción, sin mencionar que es muy estúpido a veces, cuando puede hacer un cambio para mejor no lo hace, simplemente dice dos o tres palabras y se queda callado, lo peor de todo es que ni siquiera tiene sentido la historia, constantemente sale alguien a defenderlo, si no es el 3er Hokage es Katsuyu, su waifu Yamanaka o el mismísimo Daimo... Simplemente ridículo.
I really liked the concept, in which he shows that he does not want to be someone else's prisoner, however it is true that he is op, something that personally is not a problem but I think it should be stated beforehand, in general I like his personality that I feel is very calm (I have seen that others see it as hollow or flat but that is their opinion)
The only good thing about this story is the idea and premise. from the execution of it to the grammar thats heavily influenced by Chinese literature or Google translator. The worst part of this story though is the characters. they've been warped from their original versions, heavily influenced by other dumb fanfics, from the tropes to the way they speak. its the authors story but making half the characters just worse versions simply makes the story worse. Let's not start with the MC. Hes boring. doesn't really have emotions. doesn't like people. doesn't like things, doesn't like life. Nothing driving him except revenge which gets stale when he's so one dimensional. I know this is the only type of MC the author writes because Google translate can't translate emotions so i shouldn't of expected different. He's basically a God at this point too. got tired one because he was playing with his food for so long so thats just the author nerfing him when necessary. Its sad, I'd love to see another author give this story a try.
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Good idea. Bad execution, MC is basically the Hokages dog, at least up to chapter 36
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I don't understand, why such a low rating. I really like your work. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The concept of the story is good. The idea of a blind Hyuga is very original and this is the only good point of this story, everything else is done horribly wrong. There is a romance between the Mc and Ino and it's incredibly forced. The villains are just plain Chinese bad guys cliche. The author lacks a clear understanding of how the worlds of both Naruto and One Piece work. His use of observation haki is not wrong but very lacking. The Mc master the usage of storm release a combination of both thunder and wind release in just under three years. The Mc is ruthless with his enemy and doesn't hesitate to kill when necessary despite coming from our world and coming from a peaceful country and his character development was never shown. Despite using the Fujitora template the Mc only sharing trait between them is that they are blind. Obviously, Fujitora's power is used, but if it wasn't specified that he was using the Fujitora template I would not be able to tell at first. Worst of all Rock Lee is just mentioned in passing. He had almost no impact on the story until I stopped reading. At least there don't seem to be a lot of grammar mistakes, but English is not my birth language so I may be wrong. In short, it's a good idea and someone else should try to give the idea a chance in another story.
author keeps adding nonsense instead of just giving mc fujitora powers he goes after other bs power marks as for other problems with this fanfic other users alreay said it LoL not gonna repeat the whole pile of problems
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I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! Like there's no mistakes and the writing quality is just so good. I love the story so much. But if there's gonna be romance please don't make it forced or like idk how to explain it. btw i love how fast the updates are! ANYWAY please keep up the good work!!
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