Burning Strings: A warlock of the Magus world Fanfic

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evodbz134

Obligatory self review. This is my first piece of writing if you have any criticism please leave it down in the comments. I have no one to proofread yet if someone wants to volunteer just comment below.

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SIN3

Hello. How are you, translator, dear to my heart? Before I start my speech, I want to ask you a question: Will you complete this very beautiful novel? . And now I will give my assessment of this novel. The novel has potential because of its writer. I liked the idea that starting from Leylin's birth this will allow him to get to know them and allow the hero to build an affection for them as well as a personality. But there is a small negative point that I personally did not like, but it is not a big thing for me, which is “skipping the training and penetrations of the knight and the great knight.” I hoped that you would not skip these things and go deeper into the topic of herbs, not skip, that would be better and build Greater depth to the story and it will build, and the details and depth will build an emotion and attachment to the novel from the "scenes", which leads to the viewer's love for the novel, but I personally think that this thing or topic will not continue until our hero reaches the power of magicians. I hope that the skipping periods in the academy and Others, too, would be a beautiful thing if you gave the hero charisma strength in the convoy heading to the witches' port. According to the character of the hero, I have no objection to making the hero the merchant controlling trade. I support you in that, and it will also be better if you make the hero not think and do not help anyone except for a great benefit without major negatives, except for his family and those close to him. That will also be the credit. It would be better if you made him do anything or any other way to get stronger and faster also I hope you don't make the hero go to the side of the white wizards it will be boring... If you make him stay on the side of the black wizards it will be better and more interesting like that He remains on the side of the first academy, but of course, after he gets rid of the inheritance problem and abuse of that family, that is, if you make the hero kill the owner of the other special inheritance map to die in the bloodbath, the problem will be solved and I hope you make the hero take care of the family from which he came from after For the hero to settle, of course, such as making the family send people who have wizards' abilities and the hero strengthens the family with them is also better not to make the hero leave the Southern Continent until you reach the peak of rank 3 or in the middle. You can skip the Twilight Realm because it is not important for events much. chapters or more. This is my message that I wanted to convey to you. I told authors before you that, some of them heard my words succeeded, but did not complete, and some of them did not hear my words at all, and you have the choice. And hello, and thanks for reading my comment

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yuoyuo5

great start, hope to see end of it ........................................................................................................................

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Pirate_King0

please add more chapters brother i really liked your novel and there are many more like me 😃

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Nevermindthename

Pretty good writing quality and exceptional compared to the usual found on this platform, the few mistakes I found were mostly typos. Interesting plot so far. 5 stars since read worthy WMW fanfics are rare.

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Oleg_Nikitin

Спасибо за вашу работу, мне очень понравилась. Желаю вам успехов в дальнейшем и жду продолжения.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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SIN3

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kikna007

its a good start, but where are the updates?

Very good writing till now, you got the essence of WMW. If author can keep the pace and dose not copy paste the sequence of the original work. His novel will become his best starting point in his writer journey

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OukisLips

This is really good! The grammar could use some work, but the update speed, story development, character design and world background are all top notch!