A Transmigrator's Story in the Hyuga's Main Branch

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Luizz_Ricardo

author if the MC really wants to be strong and protect himself he has to be at the level of kaguya's children, so he can catch beasts with tails and cells from hashirama, tenseigan

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Fletcher_Isakson

For me overall 9/10 the only thing dragging it down is the extreme detail put into every chapter about things that we already know because this is a fan fiction not an actual new novel cuz everyone reading this has watched/read Naruto already so we don't need that extreme detail to know about the world that we already know it gets so bad that I have to skip paragraphs or even full chapters because they're just so much

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Kono_Timoda

So far it's been a great Naruto World building fanfiction and I can see the author is trying to make a very logical fanfiction. But, 30 chapters in and he's still explain the intricacies of the Hugo Clan so not much can be said...🤷‍♂️ It's well written though, and it's not as boring as you might think 🤔

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Everton_Vale_0216

the atmosphere of the work is great, MC anti selfish hero. a different view of the clan's internal politics. A big defect is the prolixity, it can be very inconvenient. explanation of the Byakugan's abilities repeatedly, events that occurred just a few chapters ago. I recommend the Author review with AI or consider that many readers will read the work in the future. I hope the reading doesn't get tiring for them and for you to continue. great fanfiction.

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SugarGodno1

Does the mc get an upgraded Byakugan ?

OFFICIAL REVIEW: (100 chapters read) Hi, here's my review on this series. The strength of this series is the political construction within the village and the clan of the protagonist with the author who managed to create intriguing patterns between the various factions. Good grammar. CONS: - Problems with writing, the author adds, in my opinion, too many useless descriptions, repeating the same thing many times, only in a different key, moving on to redundant chapters of this element. -Lack of action and characterization, In 100 chapters the element that is missing a lot is the action, with few fights and often very short. The author justifies this with the status of the protagonist, which I find ridiculous. Another negative element is the characterisation of the characters, given the actual lack of dialogue of the protagonist with the various characters, which makes everything a little soulless. OVERALL: I think the series is good from some points of view, but it is often heavy

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VladCTan

I usually just skip harem, but was in the mood for a Hyuga fanfic. Feel bad that I cant give this a better score, it does some things really well, clearly a lot of thought was put in the story, the lore expansions generally make sense and show that the writer understands more obscure lore details well. The political conflict in Konoha is cool and no one seems to be portrayed as an incompetent parody of themselves. The story was at its best when the various factions were planning and negotiating. Hokage faction versus Clan faction trying to outmaneuver each other and gain strength. Unfortunately, the are significant issues(spoilers bellow): -harem, in over 95% of stories it is cringe and does not fit the setting, not a big element for now, but 2 haremets are shaping up, Hyuga and Uchiha girls. Can't be too harsh here, since I read despite seeing the tag ,but cheapens everything it touches. -pace issues, sometimes there are entire lore paragraphs that discuss lore or bring extra explanations that completely break the flow of scenes .I actually like many of the ideas but they do break the flow. -mist jinchuriki fight and everything after in that arc , way to easy gigantic win with no sacrifices(just this win theoretically crippled Kiri forever), very easy alliance with the bloodline rebels, easily getting to the main Land of Water unopposed and now protag most likely to soon to kill the mizukage. Made Kiri in a joke.

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Narutofan

I love this fanfic but the only problem I have and it’s not really a problem, but I feel that the MC should reshape the Hyuga clan outside of the village and make it into a family clan like in cultivation novels also restructure the clan like in cultivation novels as in outer, inner,core, elder, clan leader and supreme elder, and also make the outer clan member of the clan Have the curse mark around the forehead, and also curse mark on their tongue like Danzo does with the Anbu to stop them revealing sensitive information And inner members of the Hyuga would have the curse mark around the forehead removed, but not the tongue only when you get to the level of core member would you have all curse marks removed.

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MMEStudio

Brother I have just finished your neji fanfic and I liked verymuch but I felt it's too rushed to be honest I see that you aren't making the same mistake here I hope that this new mc and I hope that u will show a humane side like neji in the latter part of the ur last novel plus romance and i will be very grateful not rushed one like the last novel plus more chapter I think it would be better if u followed the canon with some changes but not super big

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Rkwhi2

I have to say for a Hyugaa transmigration fanfic this is amazing. I love the approach of being careful and cautious especially with the Hyugaa and the fact the can really read people this was done extremely well. I can’t wait to read more I’m about half way done with the current chapters which are out at this time(I’m just starting the chapter 37) and the total chapter out is 74. I really hope this fanfic gets finished this fanfic is too good to drop.

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YourDad_

This is one of the top Naruto fanfiction because of it's various theories about the Naruto world and unique political landscape that it presents. Yet what it lacks is in Character interaction, there are very few dialogues involved between various characters that it seems more like a diary sometime. Other than that it's really good.

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Eins_olgon

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Goodluck in writing this novel! Word of advice is limit yourself to post just one chap and bonus chap to make sure you have stockpiled chapters

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RedBeard73

It’s not just slow, it’s stuffed full of completely useless exposition and explanations. Entire chapters shouldn’t be used to explain why the MC does something only for the next chapter to be two or three sentences of dialogue only for the rest of the chapter to explain why the MC said what he did, and then talk about something that has nothing to do with the situation. I’m at chapter 30 and if you removed the useless exposition and explanations (not all of it just the useless stuff) I would be at max chapter 15

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Uchiha_Tomirama

I've been really spoiled by those fast paced and idiotic naruto fanfics. and this my brother healed and regenerated my lost brain cells

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Gabriel_Nevacchi

Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!!

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Fruchtkompot

A good fanfic. Altough I think the Hyuga are a bit overhyped here.

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Exi_Nexi

This is definitely one of the more well thought out and interesting Naruto fanfics I’ve read so far, so I would definitely recommend it. However, the single complaint I have is that the pacing of the plot is a bit too slow. It doesn’t really matter, but will become increasingly more noticeable when you get caught up and are reading the story one chapter at a time.

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uchiha_satoru

finally a fanfic which explores the hyuga clan, because the 700 chapter one focuses too much on chimera technique. And in this one he can take control of the hyuga clan and change it, maybe brand everyone else with the cage bird in the main family