MMORPG: Rebirth as an Alchemist

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MiuNovels

WHAT TO EXPECT 1. Rpg style (1st and 3rd POV) Story telling 2. VRMMORPG, Rebirth, Adventure, Fantasy, Action, School Life 3. Romance. NO Harem 4. OP MC 5. Cold MC. Only kind to people he cares ENTRY TO WPC 270. If you like the story consider giving a review and vote with PS. Regular updates will start if this novel win 😀 👍

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Lorenzo_Kim

**HONEST REVIEW FROM A REAL READER** Hey Everyone, Just thought I'd leave my review here now that I (as a reader) have read more than 143 chapters. I believe my review will be a lot more insightful than people who have only read it for 20 or so chapters. First of all **GENERAL OVERVIEW** TLDR [for those looking to skim]: This novel is quite like your MMORPG novels. However, for those who like this genre this novel ticks all the boxes. The main character is resourceful and knows how to use opportunities from past experience to create a good head-start. He has good values and is not forceful of his opinion on others and values relationships. The damage and stat numbers are also quite balanced and I must say the class structure towards an Alchemist is very interesting and is not what you expect from a typical alchemist with those skills that Ren (The MC) Has. *PROS* : * Character Development: Ren and the people around him all have a good backstory to them. They are all connected and the good thing is that there are chapters which does not just focus on Ren only where we are allowed to look into other people's perspectives and their own respective journeys. * Abilities and their Usage The abilities that the author has come up with is definitely interesting. I would say they are the reason why I was hooked and continued to read. I really enjoy the abilities the author has created for Ren as they are very unique and have not been seen before. The way he uses the abilities are also quite planned out which adds more to the novel's flavor. *Side characters involvement and stories This is one of the best aspect of this novel: You get to understand the side characters who follow the MC that aren't just robots who are discarded later on once MC is oh so strong. They help out and their background is solid enough for you to expect them to be of help. *CONS* : * World Building [this one isn't too much of a con] So far it is not bad as the world of the novel is quite thoroughly explained and the back and forth between in real life and in game is interesting. It shows a good contrast BUT now even 143 chapters into the novel, the world building is not too clear and the direction for the future needs to be more fleshed out to create a higher sense of anticipation * Grammar and Writing This one is slightly ick-y. There are quite a number of grammatical mistakes which affects the flow of the chapter. This is evident in most of the novels here on Webnovel. However, 'MMORPG Rebirth as an Alchemist' have more of these errors and I understand that the author is looking for an editor. It is not absolutely terrible and is to be honest decent but does create a jarring sensation. Depth and Gravity of the Challenges/Plot: This con has nothing to do with how Ren fights his enemies or how the author describes the fight scenes. They are all good from what I've read. What I mean with this con is that, there needs to be a linkage between what Ren does and what he's going to do. How well he utilizes his rewards to better himself or his future self. Furthermore, there is a lack of details towards a future goal or emphasis on what is to go from a certain point from X to Y. For example: (not a spoiler as this doesn't happen in the novel - just for examples sake) Ren kills a snake dungeon boss and receives a scepter of magic water that is superior to any weapon in the game. There needs to be an internal thought dilemma as to whether he utilizes it for himself, saves it for a future team partner, sells for money to help his family or himself, blueprint it, or use it as an extended quest line. What I am trying to say is deepen the plot with each plot that appears and show how they can link with each other and to be more detailed with certain events so that readers can expect the unexpected. Thank you <3 :D

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HotChairsLover

Idea is good and i'm very interested in continuing reading the story but i'm so tired of side characters. Almost all of side characters have disgusting personality and it takes away the desire to read at least something where the main character is not involved. Even if they are side characters with more or less good personalities. I think I already skipped about half the chapters because of this. I hope the development of the story will be better further and I will not have to skip a bunch of chapters again. The GIF below is my reaction to the vast majority of side characters

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me_casa

five stars cause alchemy and alchemy is cool and not enough stuff is written about it so gonna stick w this till it eventually goes into money phases

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Coffeeparty

Is it just me or is leonel a 12 year old? it's painful to read due to how immature he is. But still good novel tho. I just hope leo died somehow. Kekw.

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Raksha1

When I look at video games novels I think of entertaining and exhilarating things. This story starts off nicely, setting a good tone for the story. Not much info dump, but we still get to learn a thing or two about the protagonist. The writing style is good, with well-chosen words and expressions. So far it was really enjoyable. Keep up the good work! <333

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Conquistadore

As many have accented earlier, I too am not entirely happy with the volactile personality of Ren and other characters, but what amazes me most is the fact that the title contains the word "alchemy", of which, in the last 200 chapters, I have not even seen the shadow. Maybe some hints in the first chapters, but personally I have yet to see some alchemy applied in the novel.

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latheef_shaik

writing quality is good with good grammar and proper story writing. Good enough to keep readers retain the story. The story development is really good with how you wrote only the necessary details and kept readers engaged with the story. I like how the story is simple and you didn't info dump it. You are really an experienced and proper author. The character design needs some work. I mean how people hate him because he is just poor kid. And is Silvia a feminist. because readers assume things when you don't represent them. I know you want to make things suspensive but just bragging about beauty isn't how you should introduce characters. Other than that the story is very good. The updating stability is good. And world building is just good until now. As it completed in the future

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Nullsubstance

Like the path the story is taking and the style is one of my favorite. If I have to give a suggestion is to reduce a little bit the morons side of the story. This is the kind of young master owns the world and gets slap in the face, but this kind of characters should get a bit less story time to improve the pacing. Also I feel a bit sad when we get 1 character that is so bad that ruins a good story, sometimes is the MC, other times is antagonist, in this one it’s is friend Leonel. The dude have a 5years old brain and no common sence and MC instead of educate him his supporting his decisions. please upgrade him to at least a 12 years brain so he can tell right from wrong!

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Lover_of_Fantasy

this is an awesome vrmmorpg novel ive read in here! one of my fav so far! i love everything about t! five stars for me! couldn't wait to read more!

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DaoistF21Iop

everything was good then his friend appeared and I dropped it

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Kenachi

This is a really good start for this type of book I’m looking forward too future chapter most likely to be my favourite book of the year let’s hope for a lot of support from the masses lol

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Tom_The_Tom

It’s better than most novels but wouldn’t say it’s amazing. There’s something off with Ren’s personality. It’s like he’s bordering a control-freak edgelord while trying to be a calm, composed, and relatable MC. The dichotomy should be the major personal struggle of the novel but the appeal of it just falls flat. Also if you’re expecting classic Alchemy, then you’d find little of it here. World building could also use a bit more flair as it is lacking and grammar could be better but that’s just a minor issue for me.

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coolguy5000

I really liked this for one of my first novels to read though I can't seem to envision what the characters and world look like but it's really Pog!

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Helldragon_xd

So I finished all of your current chapters. So far, you've correctly estsblished the importance of the game, it's relation to the character, the character's goals and risks. Family interactions and everything seemed fine , so the initial premise set up is all well. Now the issues. Right now it's far too early to determine any plot issues that might stick out. I can't see any problems, aside from some areas with awkward wording, such as "the son of Ren's neighborhood" when introducing Roni. I'd recommend going back and perhaps polishing these areas, but those are fairly minor as it doesn't distract from the pace or the plot. There's also some minor grammar errors just as incorrect tense usage, "Ren never even met Silvia in his entire existence..." and so on. Next would be since you're writing in third person, you really need to describe the MC. early on for readers to build a easier connections. We don't really get an idea of Ren until chapter 5 during his character creation screen, and although it is good that you did so, I personally prefer it to be done early on, especially since you even have Roni, a character that readers are supposed to hate, defined before the MC. I found this to be rather awkward personally. Other than those I can't think of anything else at the moment. I hope your next chapter fleshes out Covenant well though. Be sure to make the world gripping and interesting to explore and follow.

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Daoist7Lifes

>> Read this till 280 chapter. I was really looking forward to this novel. The idea of MC being famous coz of Alchemist profession was great but till Chapter 280 there is not an ounce of alchemy involved (it might be there in later chapters but it would have been better if MC mentioned it in earlier chapters on his plans and all)World building is nice. >> Character development is okay.>> Character growth and connections with others is kinda lame. >> Starting was good and I was really looking forward to it. Later, the story keeps me thinking as if written by some 16 yr old kid.>> @Author Don't get me wrong. I've nothing against you and I would love to see this novel grow more beautifully.I would love to help if you are looking for somebody to proofread.>> I would really like it if we could connect (to bounce some ideas) Pls reply back if u r okay with it and I will send my email.