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Viết đánh giáSo the author has dropped this story already but I am still posting a review just for my own sake so that I won't reread it again. Writing Quality gets 2 stars because the translation has several errors and most importantly the author drags out EVERYTHING and makes a single conversation, letter, or inner monologue take like 5 chapters for no apparent reason. In fact, the inner monologue of the MC at the very beginning of the story takes like 4 chapters of repeating himself over and over before he does ANYTHING. Stability of Updates is 1 star since it was dropped. Story Development is 2 stars because it is horrendously SLOW due to the constant repeating thoughts and dialogue. Also, the story is taken up mostly by a completely OC environment at Salem Witches Institute that is basically just there to raise the MC's prestige in Potions and give him more OC love interests. Character Design is 2 stars because after Snape's soul merges with the Benedict guy he becomes an idiot who is constantly making mistakes that the original wouldn't have made, not to mention he is a simp/beta for literally any girl he talks to. World Background is 3 stars since MOST of it is correct, bar a few important errors. Unfortunately, the world mostly expands into the OC world of SWI so it is kind of boring IMO. Overall, I give it 2 stars and frankly don't recommend anyone reading this unless you are very good at skimming and picking out key points in massive walls of text. The writing style is such that even after picking out the key points, you will find the next 4 walls of text have the SAME key points and thus keep having to skip more and more of the story, losing details along the way. It is mind numbing and almost impossible to experience immersion while reading. The idea isn't bad at all, it is merely poorly executed.
Tiết lộ SpoilerUpdate please yessss plissssssssssssssssssssss 🥺I hope you continue🤔 Writing more chapters and you finish the story. Many begin but never end
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It's hard to read, to author write 2 paragraphs to say the same thing. 3 sentences with the same meaning using synonyms. It give me headaches. I don't like the way the character think, it's not realistic, you can see the mind of the author, the plan behind it. Hopefully the author will learn from the critics and continue to write greater ff or original stories.
This is bad. Couldn’t read past ch 11. The author has bad grammar and likes to repeat things over and over. He also likes to just put WALLS of text in one paragraph, just info dumping. He makes the mc a hypocrite every chapter. “Im over lily” then immediately proceeds to not be over her. It could be a good concept but just suuuuuper poor execution, each chapter feels like a slough to get through. Also forgot about the synopsis and forgot there was time travel. From the level of writing in the first 11 chapters, I don’t think that’s gonna go over well.
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Five chapters of repeated tosh was literally all I could take. I get the need to express his emotions and Pain plus his changes and motives. But it literally repeats the same things just worded differently.
This is such an ingenious novel! The character or Snape and modern man is shown so perfectly.....so perfect!! and the Snape's quick thinking and smartness is also shown
I would off myself with wingardium leviosa probably from the astronomy tower or in front a truck if i started as a baby snape for a remake..
Is a good piece, hopefully we got to see an end. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The premise is great but the writing just breaks the immersion. Bruh! The readers get it when you explain something once. Why're you repeatedly explaining the same, simple plot points over and over and over again, that too in the same chapter!!!! Also stop with the Merlin this and Merlin that. Just the word Merlin probably takes up 10 words your word count each chapter!
Writing quality three stars, no noticeable misspellings or grammar mistakes, pretty low rating because of so much info dumping and repeatative use of sentences already written in a chapter to other chapters. Story development five stars, good plot with a bit of originality. three star character design, you don't own/created the characters but just borrowing. five star updating stability, pretty stable release of chapters. world background three stars, you Dont own Harry Potter.
Some grammar mistakes barley any tbh P Good tho he a lil but if simp in the beginning but it’s unde rstandable.
God fanfic of HP, amo y odio a los personajes, pero en el buen sentido son creibles de verdas los caracterizas muy bien y creo que es mil veces mejor que todo lo rouling a escrito ultimamente
You gota really good story and writing but I belive that lots of users dont look book and literature section so i think should post your novel in moovies part ........................................................
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very good novel. __very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. ___________________ __________ __________ ___________ ___________ __________________________________
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I’ll be honest I just hate snapes suffering I came into this fanfic hoping it would start before it really sets in like before he insulted lily I was also under the impression lily was the main love interest from the picture that is shown for the story and I was curious to see how you would do that. (I’ll come back and read it in like 50 chapter to see where it goes.)
one of the best fanfics :D ...................................................................................................................
To clarify doubts, this fanfic is not tragic or anything like that, only the first chapters show tragedy since Snape's past is explained, but once those chapters pass it will not continue to be a tragic story.
Your fan fiction is amazing and a masterpiece. The start is quite difficult to read and Snape is like 10 chapters obsessed with Lilly. (4.4 Stars)
The story in its self is really good however the way he acts doesn’t match his history and what he’s been through, the he interacts with people also doesn’t Match with his experiences and he’s no willing to bend over backwards for any girl who’s nice to him…he is very Beta but also Alpha and it’s a strange mix
What can i say it is a masterpiece. The character development and magical world exploration is beyond amazing. ♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆
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So the author has dropped this story already but I am still posting a review just for my own sake so that I won't reread it again. Writing Quality gets 2 stars because the translation has several errors and most importantly the author drags out EVERYTHING and makes a single conversation, letter, or inner monologue take like 5 chapters for no apparent reason. In fact, the inner monologue of the MC at the very beginning of the story takes like 4 chapters of repeating himself over and over before he does ANYTHING. Stability of Updates is 1 star since it was dropped. Story Development is 2 stars because it is horrendously SLOW due to the constant repeating thoughts and dialogue. Also, the story is taken up mostly by a completely OC environment at Salem Witches Institute that is basically just there to raise the MC's prestige in Potions and give him more OC love interests. Character Design is 2 stars because after Snape's soul merges with the Benedict guy he becomes an idiot who is constantly making mistakes that the original wouldn't have made, not to mention he is a simp/beta for literally any girl he talks to. World Background is 3 stars since MOST of it is correct, bar a few important errors. Unfortunately, the world mostly expands into the OC world of SWI so it is kind of boring IMO. Overall, I give it 2 stars and frankly don't recommend anyone reading this unless you are very good at skimming and picking out key points in massive walls of text. The writing style is such that even after picking out the key points, you will find the next 4 walls of text have the SAME key points and thus keep having to skip more and more of the story, losing details along the way. It is mind numbing and almost impossible to experience immersion while reading. The idea isn't bad at all, it is merely poorly executed.
Tiết lộ SpoilerUpdate please yessss plissssssssssssssssssssss 🥺I hope you continue🤔 Writing more chapters and you finish the story. Many begin but never end
Don't read!!!! The author dropped it!![img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
It's hard to read, to author write 2 paragraphs to say the same thing. 3 sentences with the same meaning using synonyms. It give me headaches. I don't like the way the character think, it's not realistic, you can see the mind of the author, the plan behind it. Hopefully the author will learn from the critics and continue to write greater ff or original stories.
This is bad. Couldn’t read past ch 11. The author has bad grammar and likes to repeat things over and over. He also likes to just put WALLS of text in one paragraph, just info dumping. He makes the mc a hypocrite every chapter. “Im over lily” then immediately proceeds to not be over her. It could be a good concept but just suuuuuper poor execution, each chapter feels like a slough to get through. Also forgot about the synopsis and forgot there was time travel. From the level of writing in the first 11 chapters, I don’t think that’s gonna go over well.
☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆☆*:. o(≧▽≦)o .:*☆
Five chapters of repeated tosh was literally all I could take. I get the need to express his emotions and Pain plus his changes and motives. But it literally repeats the same things just worded differently.
This is such an ingenious novel! The character or Snape and modern man is shown so perfectly.....so perfect!! and the Snape's quick thinking and smartness is also shown
I would off myself with wingardium leviosa probably from the astronomy tower or in front a truck if i started as a baby snape for a remake..
Is a good piece, hopefully we got to see an end. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
The premise is great but the writing just breaks the immersion. Bruh! The readers get it when you explain something once. Why're you repeatedly explaining the same, simple plot points over and over and over again, that too in the same chapter!!!! Also stop with the Merlin this and Merlin that. Just the word Merlin probably takes up 10 words your word count each chapter!
Writing quality three stars, no noticeable misspellings or grammar mistakes, pretty low rating because of so much info dumping and repeatative use of sentences already written in a chapter to other chapters. Story development five stars, good plot with a bit of originality. three star character design, you don't own/created the characters but just borrowing. five star updating stability, pretty stable release of chapters. world background three stars, you Dont own Harry Potter.
Some grammar mistakes barley any tbh P Good tho he a lil but if simp in the beginning but it’s unde rstandable.
God fanfic of HP, amo y odio a los personajes, pero en el buen sentido son creibles de verdas los caracterizas muy bien y creo que es mil veces mejor que todo lo rouling a escrito ultimamente
You gota really good story and writing but I belive that lots of users dont look book and literature section so i think should post your novel in moovies part ........................................................
long, boring, repetitive, too long paragraphs, all of this forcing me to stop reading this...[̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅][̲̅$̲̅(̲̅ ͡ಠ_ಠ)̲̅$̲̅]
very good novel. __very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. very good novel. ___________________ __________ __________ ___________ ___________ __________________________________
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I’ll be honest I just hate snapes suffering I came into this fanfic hoping it would start before it really sets in like before he insulted lily I was also under the impression lily was the main love interest from the picture that is shown for the story and I was curious to see how you would do that. (I’ll come back and read it in like 50 chapter to see where it goes.)
one of the best fanfics :D ...................................................................................................................
To clarify doubts, this fanfic is not tragic or anything like that, only the first chapters show tragedy since Snape's past is explained, but once those chapters pass it will not continue to be a tragic story.
Your fan fiction is amazing and a masterpiece. The start is quite difficult to read and Snape is like 10 chapters obsessed with Lilly. (4.4 Stars)
The story in its self is really good however the way he acts doesn’t match his history and what he’s been through, the he interacts with people also doesn’t Match with his experiences and he’s no willing to bend over backwards for any girl who’s nice to him…he is very Beta but also Alpha and it’s a strange mix
What can i say it is a masterpiece. The character development and magical world exploration is beyond amazing. ♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡♡☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆☆
80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot 80% filler 20%plot
I'm guessing it isn't lily evan then this would turn into a pedo which is disgusting