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The writing in this fanfiction is generally satisfactory, but there's room for improvement in terms of paragraph structure. The text often presents as a daunting 'wall of text', which can be quite exhausting to read. Utilizing new lines more frequently to break up the text would greatly enhance readability. Regarding the integration of the main character into the existing canon, I feel there's a missed opportunity. The character doesn't seem to add significant value to the narrative. In adaptations like this, it's often said that it's better to "show, not tell," but in this case, when the storyline closely follows the original canon, a concise summary might be more effective. Additionally, the concept of a 'cat demon' doesn't quite blend seamlessly with the established elements of the story. It feels reminiscent of a typical Naruto plot device, lacking originality. I also have reservations about the age of the main character. While I understand that they are a reincarnated individual, a time skip in the story might be more appropriate, especially when considering romantic developments with significantly older characters. Speaking of romance, it currently feels a bit rushed. Allowing the romantic aspects to develop more slowly and organically could benefit the overall narrative. On a positive note, I really appreciate how the main character expresses himself. His unique voice and perspective are engaging and add a distinct flavor to the story. This aspect is one of the highlights and contributes positively to the fanfiction.
How I wanted the continuation ~~hfhfkdjgdgdjdnfsjgdjgkydykdjykysjsjydgjzhfshtdkgfkfjgfydydjfjc. Jcucn ubohufuwgwgiwcjsfusgsvjdjsjs de jdjsjdjjdhsfhwjhdkshd Ju ufhfufhfhfjdjdjdjdjdjjcjdjdjd um sufuwidjjduddjudndhenens
I really like it❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️
I love this fanfic, but when comes out a new chapter?........................................
please continue this is a story that is missing in the cute fluffy genre, a good romantic couple please continue🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰💋💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕
I have to admit that I was sad when I saw that I would have to wait for updates, but also, happy because, the good feeling of reading this story won't end anytime soon. thanks for grace us with your story [img=update]
i like how you made shizuya like a cat just witout the ears and tail. i have a guess that maybe In the future he will have another form that turn him to have cat ears and tail (my idea is from the moment Naruto have that kyubi chakra around him that made him look like he have kurama's ears and tail)
I love this very much! I’ not to care about gramm or anything since I can’t write. So this is rea good to me I enjoyed it!! I hope you continue it when you have time!!!
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very nice. The interaction of the character with Kakashi is very good, I can't stop smiling while reading, I hope the new episode will come often and when will the next new episode come?
Writer, don't write this story on a straight site, you write this story on wattpad, I'm really fed up with stupid writers😐👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎
moreeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
love everything so farrr plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz dont droppp 😂😂😂 this is really intersting hehehehehehehehehehehehehehe this is really good
I really enjoy this story, especially Shizuya's sarcasm, his comments and how he interacts with Kakashi. Kakashi himself appears to differ from the original to some extend. And if I'm to go by the hints drizzled about here and there, there seems to be some underlying background between the two which will probably revealed as the story progresses. Can't wait to see where this will go! Regarding the technicalities, there were maybe a handful of minor grammatical issues here and there, but it was nothing major and mostly unnoticeable unless you're specifically looking for it. The story has a nice flow to it, if a bit on the slower side in terms of progress. Things could move along a tad bit faster, though that's probably a personal preference of mine. All in all, well done baby cousin of mine. I'm proud of you.😘 (A totally not biased review btw 🤫)
The writing in this fanfiction is generally satisfactory, but there's room for improvement in terms of paragraph structure. The text often presents as a daunting 'wall of text', which can be quite exhausting to read. Utilizing new lines more frequently to break up the text would greatly enhance readability. Regarding the integration of the main character into the existing canon, I feel there's a missed opportunity. The character doesn't seem to add significant value to the narrative. In adaptations like this, it's often said that it's better to "show, not tell," but in this case, when the storyline closely follows the original canon, a concise summary might be more effective. Additionally, the concept of a 'cat demon' doesn't quite blend seamlessly with the established elements of the story. It feels reminiscent of a typical Naruto plot device, lacking originality. I also have reservations about the age of the main character. While I understand that they are a reincarnated individual, a time skip in the story might be more appropriate, especially when considering romantic developments with significantly older characters. Speaking of romance, it currently feels a bit rushed. Allowing the romantic aspects to develop more slowly and organically could benefit the overall narrative. On a positive note, I really appreciate how the main character expresses himself. His unique voice and perspective are engaging and add a distinct flavor to the story. This aspect is one of the highlights and contributes positively to the fanfiction.
How I wanted the continuation ~~hfhfkdjgdgdjdnfsjgdjgkydykdjykysjsjydgjzhfshtdkgfkfjgfydydjfjc. Jcucn ubohufuwgwgiwcjsfusgsvjdjsjs de jdjsjdjjdhsfhwjhdkshd Ju ufhfufhfhfjdjdjdjdjdjjcjdjdjd um sufuwidjjduddjudndhenens
I really like it❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️✨❤️
I love this fanfic, but when comes out a new chapter?........................................
please continue this is a story that is missing in the cute fluffy genre, a good romantic couple please continue🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰💋💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕
I have to admit that I was sad when I saw that I would have to wait for updates, but also, happy because, the good feeling of reading this story won't end anytime soon. thanks for grace us with your story [img=update]
i like how you made shizuya like a cat just witout the ears and tail. i have a guess that maybe In the future he will have another form that turn him to have cat ears and tail (my idea is from the moment Naruto have that kyubi chakra around him that made him look like he have kurama's ears and tail)
I love this very much! I’ not to care about gramm or anything since I can’t write. So this is rea good to me I enjoyed it!! I hope you continue it when you have time!!!
..................................................................................................................................................….........................? 🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮
very nice. The interaction of the character with Kakashi is very good, I can't stop smiling while reading, I hope the new episode will come often and when will the next new episode come?
Writer, don't write this story on a straight site, you write this story on wattpad, I'm really fed up with stupid writers😐👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎
moreeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
love everything so farrr plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz dont droppp 😂😂😂 this is really intersting hehehehehehehehehehehehehehe this is really good
I really enjoy this story, especially Shizuya's sarcasm, his comments and how he interacts with Kakashi. Kakashi himself appears to differ from the original to some extend. And if I'm to go by the hints drizzled about here and there, there seems to be some underlying background between the two which will probably revealed as the story progresses. Can't wait to see where this will go! Regarding the technicalities, there were maybe a handful of minor grammatical issues here and there, but it was nothing major and mostly unnoticeable unless you're specifically looking for it. The story has a nice flow to it, if a bit on the slower side in terms of progress. Things could move along a tad bit faster, though that's probably a personal preference of mine. All in all, well done baby cousin of mine. I'm proud of you.😘 (A totally not biased review btw 🤫)