Marvel: Breezing Through History as an Eternal

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mark_kiple

hey, i realised i haven't given my thoughts on this book as a whole, so I'll review my own book lol. 1. Story: It depends on how you view it, it's technically slow-paced, but it's fast paced at the same time? idk how to describe it really, it starts at 5000 BCE, so quite far from modern day, and probably 70~80 % of the story takes place before canon, so if you don't like that sort of thing, you should find something else to read. the story is about a guy who's reincarnated as an eternal and he tried to live for thousands of years, seeing history using his own eyes, that's it really, that's the main premise, but a lot happened in between, the MC will 'lose' his sense of humanity as time goes on because of isolation, then gaining it again as he find love in the people he met along the way, this story isn't just about romantic love, it's also about familial love, how Mc deals with his family, and the love-hate relationship that comes with it. I admit, at the start is probably rough and cringy because I just started writing at that time and have no idea on what to do with the story, but it gets better(kind of?). I don't want to go to spoiler teritory here, but, let's be honest, most of you want to read a fanfic if you know who's the fml is, and in this fanfic, it's Thena, and only Thena. 2. World Building: I mean it's marvel. well, it's more history rather than marvel, cause as I said earlier it's 70~80% of the story takes place before canon so history plays a big part in this story. 3. Grammar: I don't speak english actively, so grammar is really hard to monitor sometimes, and I'm too lazy to find someone to proofread. 4. Stability: can't really update daily anymore, I'll just update when I have time 5. Character: Some say that this book doesn't have any character development, some say it has amazing development, and I guess both of them are right? I mean it depends on what 'Character Development' mean to you. if you like instant development, edgy/don't-care-about-people MC, that kind of stuff, than this book's not for you. anyways, if you want other opinions, scroll down, there's a lot of opinion lol. anyway, based on the review I saw, a lot of you dropped around 20ish chapters, and that's fine I guess, but I suggest you read until Chapter 50 until you form your opinion. Oh, and don't spam reviews, it's meaningless and annoying. I've got nothing else to say really, it's not really my best work per se as it's my second attempt at writing that went above expectations, but I'm quite proud of this book, mainly at me driving off the urges to drop it lol. that's it. bye

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Dr_Chad

I don't know about others but I hate Mc's personality. His personality is static, for over centuries no MC character development. Yeah, you heard me, no character development. Other characters have their own development but MC is stagnant. Even learning that he was killed by One Above All and was pushed around the bush like a slave, he didn't even have a trace of contempt. Yeah, he was like just chill about it. Even if you knew that the enemy your facing is omnipotent one should have a trace of hatred even if little but MC here was so ok being killed and was chosen to do things without hating OAA (no sort of revenge and planning for over centuries just to pay back OAA). A lot of cringe sentences and dialogue between characters. He kept saying that he viewed human as monkeys which is very hypocrite since he was a human himself in his last life. Even if his body synthetic since he is Eternal, don't forget that their minds are of mortal. That's why they got that dementia type of disease, Mahd WyRy. Over all, the world background is OK, since it was related to history even if I don't know some of it. And like the update stability is so slow. If you wanted to read, just hoard it and wait like 2 months before reading it again. And on top of that, MC is a freaking monk who journey towards the path of enlightenment. Yeah, a freaking dysf*nction*l virg*n who don't want to have romance since he viewed humans a lower life form. F**k, there are a lot of famous woman figure throughout the history like Cleopatra, Helen of Troy, etc. Don't expect MC to have any form of s*xu*l life even one night stand, since according to him he can't have s*x with 'monkeys'. Don't hate this review since it is just personal. I don't like MCs character development and creation.

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Thigs_0508

After my fanfic addiction started, I can't watch a movie anymore without thinking about the possible fanfic that will appear or what it would be like to have a fanfic about something from the movie.

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bigpollo

The MC sits around and does virtually nothing for the first 800 years. Every character interaction is cringe worthy and seems so fake. Disregarding the weird uses of slang, the mc is very unlikeable for and SI character. I recommend the author rewrite, but lord knows that they won’t listen to a reviewer. MC is an eternal that is quite possibly the most boring, door-mat like b**** I have ever read. I don’t know how this story is as highly rated as it is.

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Zen_Killua

I actually hesitated before reading this because of the reviews but looks like you can't trust 'reviews' with nothing but them, ranting about the story not fitting in their personal taste. Writing quality - I see no grammatical errors. Or maybe there are errors but i missed it since it's insignificant . Story development - Honestly, i really like it. I like how it's fast-paced but at the same time, slow-paced. I like the mc's adventure. From a human to an eternal with human's soul to a 'human eternal' who lost his humanity to an eternal who, in his opinion, eternals are superior than human to an eternal who gained back a bit of his humanity to an eternal who loved a child an acted as her father to a loving husband. I really like this. Characters - Above average. It's not like those top-tier novels where characters feels real but it's not like those stories where the characters are like robot reading scripts. Though, i must say, i really like mc's design. Both his outer and inner appearance. Updating stability - It's in semi-hiatus state as author said but i think it's the author is updating fine. Like it updates averaging 1 every 1-2 days. World background - Well, should we even talk about it? I mean, it's a fanfic, there's already a world behind it. Though, again i must say, exploring the history and using it is a very good idea. I also like the changes he made. Anyway, as you can see, I'm trying not to give spoilers as i don't want to ruin your experiences. Just dig in, honestly. Don't let the low reviews dictate what you will and won't read. As a reader, my advice is just risk it, dig in, and see if it suits your taste. To author, please don't ever drop this. I love thia story very much. Just watched the movie and this story satiated my thirst. Just want to say thank you very much!

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Rix

Dont expect a good story for sure! It takes forever to start and the author makes mc werid and unliked for some reason. Wouldnt recommend! :(

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Sacrefin

This is just what i needed ,i watched the movie when it came out tho it was a good movie i felt that there was alot missing ,really excited about where you are going with this and i hope you wont drop it maybe and romance between oc and thena

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Daoist423242

Out of all the eternals he was the one who was pretty not close to human, , come on he was onCe A human, even if he forgets his identity he should at least Be more closer to human than the eternals cause he knows them 🙂.

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Gabriel_Cabral

I don't even know how to feel, the story was going very well, but here comes the author and makes the mistake of making the "MC" has his powers taken away by the arishem, and his powers like him were made by the OAA, never that arishem it was stronger than OAA, for me this just shows the point that at any moment you can take the power away from the "MC", so what's the point of reading this story? Writing Quality- 4 Stability of Updates- 4 Story Development- 2 Character Design- 2 World Background- 2

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Karminica

Writing is solid as well as character development, pretty good so far in my humble opinion. **************************************************************************

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LokeErBest

It went well until like chapter 200 or something, since thats were the story should've ended. instead we get another mc, his son. it's cringe at times, almost no character development, slow start and weird choices throughout.

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Czeko

great fanfic, really calm, interesting and didn't bore me at all. i like the character development, i just hope for some bigger timeskips and chapter updates!

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Avengtank

The story was going very good , i was waiting for more and more chapters each day but then suddenly the MC and thena had a child around 200 ish chapter , then the MC suddenly changed to his child. Now with the recent chapters are full of Teenage drama with MCs child and gwen. The more chapters we go the less we see MC and story progression. The exact reason 90% reason no one likes boruto is happening here In 20 recent chapter we can see the MC one or twice and the rest are all full of teen drama with helios. I guess author after taking a break lost track where to take the story. If the story improves in the upcoming chapter then i guess i will change my review or if its all about helios and replacing the actual MC the i guess will drop this.

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Feeelps

It's pretty cool but there are some things that make the story a little weird like how long it takes him to make advances with his skills, for example, it took him 50 years to find out that he can re-match monsters he's already matched, I know he has a lot of time and maybe but it seems he's not even trying to improve with the time each new discovery takes (google translator)

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Ballad

A really fun read and a very enjoyable MC hes powers are pretty cool too he's like a Zerg Lord or something as for romance it hasn't been shown but their Immortals so these things take time.

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roexikolweni

its good, I really like where you are taking this and I'm excited.

the rating is 5 stars because of me liking the story overall. I love the story cuz, 1. it cover large part of human history, 2. its eternals, 3. one-man army and his actual army, 4. Pairing Pluto x Thena which I hope it continue as such, maybe in the future he can convence Arishem to do some changes on the eternals like allowing Sprite grow until she mature fully, and let eternals be able to reproduce, 5. I hope that you can explore things from marvelverse outside of eternals plot, like Pluto helping Ancient One (Yao) and later Dr. Strange in some of the threats that are looming over the world, maybe make him appear in some scenes like Stan Lee (RIP), 6. hope that Pluto deal with Kroo as fast as possible, I am really not one for having MC lose some or all of his family for character developpment or power up, cuz he know pretty well what is coming thus would make him guilty for not preventing it. I also want to say you should make Pluto to be sent to explore the depth of Sea, cuz I'm sure there should be tons of deviants there, larger and more dangerous ones, and their numbers should be far too large compared to land and air deviants, cuz as you know most of earth mass is composed of water and that means it should house more deviants, larger ones, and more dangerous. also imagine if there is some kind of big bad boss deviant living within the core of earth from very ancient times, surviving for millions of years absorbing all kind of creatures until it became really God like Deviant, that would make for an EPIC fight with Pluto always having it easy, and then a real threat appear and needs Pluto to go all out and barely win, but such deviant would give a big boost when he absorb his cosmic energy and then make him onto a construct, also may I suggest after that he make a fusion of all his constructs including that one too and naming the construct as Azathoth. also don't forget if possible to take on some frost giants, and fire demons as constructs, possibly even Asgardians Einherjars, all of those are guaranted to be intelligent constructs cuz from what I saw if one have a certain level of intelligence, they can retain it as constructs.

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PicoPico

This is really great i like how the mc interacts... and how the author try to build a world and not jumping to events...This is really great this should be high rating. Author you are doing a great job.

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The_Young_Flash

Can't wait for more, this is amazing fanfic... I just hope he finds someone to love soon... Who are you planning for the love interests? Pluto is also a cool name...

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soubhik05

Good going so far make his constructs like netero’s HxH 100 hands Buddhists stand or like susano of sasuke Make it so they can integrate with him this empowering Him so he can even go toe to toe against Celestials and physically y he’s Strong enough to not die from a sneak attack of Ikaris or anyone for that matter