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volta com o lançamento dessa fanfic por favor, melhor fanfic sua cara sou muito fan dessas fanfic de criação de reino do zero principalmente com essas convocações de herois historicos.
Starts the year back with the release of King of Yunkai GOT Human Hero Summon System.
Quero mais capitulos menó vamo meu fí, mas a fic é otima cumpadre ................................................................................................................................
please do not abandon it is very good .......................................................................................................................
marcelinho estou feliz que não tenha morrido pro covid 19 e esteja voltado a fazer fanfic, mas gostaria de saber se vai voltar a lançar a King of Yunkai GOT Human Hero Summon System serio na minha opinião melhor FANFIC de GOT.
dude, i saw that you started a more fanfic release and i would like to know if you will release this one again
As soon as romance came 2nd chapter I left it had good potential tial If he would stick to the conquring the bad writing was 1 thing but the romance made it bad
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this is a wonderful story i absolutely love it. I got hooked from the first chapter. keep up with updates. pls keep doing the same wonderful job
The story is pretty good and original for me. I love kingdom building and I really like the idea of using famous people from history. The thing is that it needs a lot of editing, like: - Stop using ... that much - Stop with the "heheheh", "hahahaha" in the middle of character thoughs... Even in dialogues it doesn't look good. - That also includes the moaning. Quoting ch15: "ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" All the things mentioned above lowers the quality of the fic. I see that people commented some mistakes... but you still didn't edit them... I hope you continue to improve as a writer. Good luck.
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pretty good story, the character is a bit too naive in following the battle rules of the medieval age, also cant he develop more things?......
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This is amazing, the grammar is barely perfect, and same with the updates, every day without failure. The story is also great and very original. The characters, are very simple but i think that the author did a good job representing the historical characters, and with the world background, is also very good. I only see 2 problems, one personal, and other for the story. The first is that the MC is not near to canon. So probably Daenerys will never exist, and same with a lot of characters of the og show. The second thing, is, or a mistake of this novel, or a mistake in the original series. And that is that here, is too hard to conquer. Daenerys, conquered all the free cities without any problem. Like when you go to the bathroom. But the MC had a lot of problems for only Astapor, even with commanders way better than any character of GOT. But as i said, i think that this is more realist than the plot armor of Daenerys. With only 8.000 immaculate, she conquered most of the cities, while the MC has like 15.000 immaculates and 60.000 other soldiers trained by Julio Caesar or Annibal. But i think that this is a problem of GOT, or that you made stronger the free cities. And if you made the second, then you should make easier the conquest of Westeros.
Hi Author! Really love your fanfic concept for GoT. It's unique and refreshing. No one has really thought (based on what I've seen so far and it's a lot) to start at Essos and as a Wise Master at that. I'm very excited to see what more you've got in store for us. Also very much looking forward to the changes the MC would bring to Daenarys conquest in Essos. If you would follow closely the timeline and events the only way you could do it is by marrying Daenarys with MC. Or not? Looking forward how you play this one. I have few to several suggestions on comments on specific chapters. Hope you read it all. It's all long but I think it's worth the read. Hope you think so too. The only other thing I could say is to improve the sentence structure and formatting in paragraphs. It sometimes confused me who's the one talking especially if there's also error in grammar or pronoun usage. I strongly suggest you get an editor. You could get one for free you could just ask somewhere or someone. I also suggest you create a Discord to centralize and make it more efficient to ask for polls and receive suggestions. You could also try and create your own 'P.atreon'. On my opinion, your work is very much worth it to create one. You just gotta fine tune or refine the writing quality (spelling, grammar, etc.). Hope you keep it up and don't drop this. I'm rooting for you!!! Thanks for writing this story of yours.
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I like it but the grammar needs a major fix, it puts me off some times but the over all background and development seem very promising, I suggest to read it if you don't have any problems with errors!!
great story based on creating a kingdom on the continent of essos before robert's rebellion with a system that can summon famous generals in human history to fight and help the MC.
Сама возможность призывать таких исключительно неординарных личностей так часто уже очень мощно, но кроме это гг также сразу после переселения, бывший ранее обыкновенным обывателем, сразу превращается в завоевателя. И я говорю не о том, что у него нет знаний и навыков, а о том, что менталитет и привычки так быстро не меняются. Не говоря уже о решимости, силе воли и даже некоторой одержимости властью.
volta com o lançamento dessa fanfic por favor, melhor fanfic sua cara sou muito fan dessas fanfic de criação de reino do zero principalmente com essas convocações de herois historicos.
Starts the year back with the release of King of Yunkai GOT Human Hero Summon System.
Quero mais capitulos menó vamo meu fí, mas a fic é otima cumpadre ................................................................................................................................
please do not abandon it is very good .......................................................................................................................
marcelinho estou feliz que não tenha morrido pro covid 19 e esteja voltado a fazer fanfic, mas gostaria de saber se vai voltar a lançar a King of Yunkai GOT Human Hero Summon System serio na minha opinião melhor FANFIC de GOT.
dude, i saw that you started a more fanfic release and i would like to know if you will release this one again
As soon as romance came 2nd chapter I left it had good potential tial If he would stick to the conquring the bad writing was 1 thing but the romance made it bad
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Vou deixar numa média de 4 porquê cê tá querendo pica e não tá sabendo pedir KKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK KKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK KKKKKKKKKKKKKKK KKKKKKKKKKKKKKK KKKKKKKKKKKKKKK
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this is a wonderful story i absolutely love it. I got hooked from the first chapter. keep up with updates. pls keep doing the same wonderful job
The story is pretty good and original for me. I love kingdom building and I really like the idea of using famous people from history. The thing is that it needs a lot of editing, like: - Stop using ... that much - Stop with the "heheheh", "hahahaha" in the middle of character thoughs... Even in dialogues it doesn't look good. - That also includes the moaning. Quoting ch15: "ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh" All the things mentioned above lowers the quality of the fic. I see that people commented some mistakes... but you still didn't edit them... I hope you continue to improve as a writer. Good luck.
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pretty good story, the character is a bit too naive in following the battle rules of the medieval age, also cant he develop more things?......
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This is amazing, the grammar is barely perfect, and same with the updates, every day without failure. The story is also great and very original. The characters, are very simple but i think that the author did a good job representing the historical characters, and with the world background, is also very good. I only see 2 problems, one personal, and other for the story. The first is that the MC is not near to canon. So probably Daenerys will never exist, and same with a lot of characters of the og show. The second thing, is, or a mistake of this novel, or a mistake in the original series. And that is that here, is too hard to conquer. Daenerys, conquered all the free cities without any problem. Like when you go to the bathroom. But the MC had a lot of problems for only Astapor, even with commanders way better than any character of GOT. But as i said, i think that this is more realist than the plot armor of Daenerys. With only 8.000 immaculate, she conquered most of the cities, while the MC has like 15.000 immaculates and 60.000 other soldiers trained by Julio Caesar or Annibal. But i think that this is a problem of GOT, or that you made stronger the free cities. And if you made the second, then you should make easier the conquest of Westeros.
Hi Author! Really love your fanfic concept for GoT. It's unique and refreshing. No one has really thought (based on what I've seen so far and it's a lot) to start at Essos and as a Wise Master at that. I'm very excited to see what more you've got in store for us. Also very much looking forward to the changes the MC would bring to Daenarys conquest in Essos. If you would follow closely the timeline and events the only way you could do it is by marrying Daenarys with MC. Or not? Looking forward how you play this one. I have few to several suggestions on comments on specific chapters. Hope you read it all. It's all long but I think it's worth the read. Hope you think so too. The only other thing I could say is to improve the sentence structure and formatting in paragraphs. It sometimes confused me who's the one talking especially if there's also error in grammar or pronoun usage. I strongly suggest you get an editor. You could get one for free you could just ask somewhere or someone. I also suggest you create a Discord to centralize and make it more efficient to ask for polls and receive suggestions. You could also try and create your own 'P.atreon'. On my opinion, your work is very much worth it to create one. You just gotta fine tune or refine the writing quality (spelling, grammar, etc.). Hope you keep it up and don't drop this. I'm rooting for you!!! Thanks for writing this story of yours.
Good Good Good Goodleopolpo Lepo lepo Aiaiaiaiauiggggggggggggggfkakahwywiqiahahhwuw ansiosamente laoalalql2ieuysa Akjsueowowyeyeirorllehwuslfkenqgsidlwnwy72949e Jaime lutador ela estava muito duro e concordei de jada enquanto metia sem dúvida não é meu mado pois ele não podia mais de minutos
I like it but the grammar needs a major fix, it puts me off some times but the over all background and development seem very promising, I suggest to read it if you don't have any problems with errors!!
great story based on creating a kingdom on the continent of essos before robert's rebellion with a system that can summon famous generals in human history to fight and help the MC.
Сама возможность призывать таких исключительно неординарных личностей так часто уже очень мощно, но кроме это гг также сразу после переселения, бывший ранее обыкновенным обывателем, сразу превращается в завоевателя. И я говорю не о том, что у него нет знаний и навыков, а о том, что менталитет и привычки так быстро не меняются. Не говоря уже о решимости, силе воли и даже некоторой одержимости властью.