MHA : True Power of Telekinesis

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Wandering_Swordman

Author Pls Create One Piece Fanfic with Telekinesis Devil Fruit[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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RavenClock

This is really mediocre, just waist time . Thankfully the format for dialogue is good and the punctuation is almost always there But other than that, it's the typical bull

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TempestasUmbra

Very intersting idea, but a horrendous execution of said idea. The MC‘s character is very inconsistent and unstable. One moment he says that he would feel no guilt over crushing the hope of a child, the next moment his hero-syndrom goes full on and he says this world needs heros and he will make it so by creating a villain persona??!! ANYTHING besides the telekinetic powers(which are executed poorly in my oppinon) in tjis story is basically unbearable to read… First of all and probably most improtant: Why dies he even care about heros and villain, what is it to him that he wants to change the entire society? Really just why? His hero-compley is basically god-level for this alone… Secondly, why us his character so unstable? Just decide already on his disposition and don‘t change just to keep the canon intact. Another problem is the MC‘s unreasonable power-ups. It is an established fact that quirks grow with use and can even evolve, BUT this is a slow and gradual process that takes a lot of time. Also basic laws of energie conservation tells us that you can‘t ‚just‘ teleport or warp space without a MASSIVE AMOUNT of energy. His progress with his quirk disregards these two points totally, which disappointed me greatly.

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dagoyaju

The MC is a control freak and a phsychopath, until at least ch. 30 couldn´t bring myself to read further, since personality went from bad to worse, even if his goals seem noble. I got a strong dislike for MCs that view people like vermine and try to be noble about it. I think it is a good story but I dispise the MC so utterly, that I have to stop reading the story, BUT that is just me being me.

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CharlesC

The story development seems too forced and quick. The grammar is a bit off, and the writing itself is really bland. Adding to the emotionless story, the MC seems very cliché, white hair and red eyes.

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Paradox2000

It's a great novel for someone who is writing for the first time, the MC is over powered, cold and manipulative. As author-san says in aux chapters that he plans to give the MC a challenge and have a storyline planned, I am looking forward to that

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Shiro_Kuroyami

I found it a very interesting story, after all it's not every day that you see the use of an extremely underestimated power. In addition to being a different story (at least for me) because of the protagonist's objective

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UnfortunateReader

Read if you want there are some inconsistency, overall though a decent read to pass time. Author is a newbie so it's as expected, hope you keep writing to improve. Good luck.

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xXZeroXxtt

very good you really are great I hope and this story lasts a long time, if I WANT MORE!!! [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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lIREYIl

first of all i love the idea of the story i was really looking forward to a mc in mha fanfic with telekinesis power, good job author! but... let me tell you i love stories with op mc but this is just too much even op characters aren't god like from chapter 2 of the story it just make the story a little bland unless you are going for a story like one punch man also there are little to no dialogues the author doesn't tell the story of how he manipulates or gets friends with deku . So dear author i want to tell you that it's ok to make your mc op but it would be better to make it eventually or start as level 10 then eventually to 100 (if you don't want it to start as level 1) instead of level 100 from the very beginning. another thing is that either keep the original personality of the original characters ( like izuku) or make it clear that they have a different personality from the anime (like izuku being more realistic and be actually mad at bakugo for what he did because I don't think he would so easily befriend mc after he hurts bakugo, cannon izuku is stupid) and the last thing is that, make some actual story not just an explanation of what is happening, dialogues are really important in making the story to feel more real and help the reader to understand and know the mc more! (btw sorry if there is any error in my grammar )

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_Kaitlin_

I just read the chapters up until the 22 days ago or so…. Just yay~ I real liked it so far. When it updates I might just be there to read it! Come on…. But for real the amount of kines isn’t on the radar in a lot of books or shows….

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Cookiesandcream4

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Suzaku_

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DandeLion

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Kanatia_Valen

E lá vou de novo em mais uma revisão sendo que minha opinião quase sempre é uma besta. Seguinte: Só lendo os 3 primeiros capítulos eu já consegui prever algumas coisas, tipo os desenvolvimentos de personagens vão ser quase inexistente, o autor vai usar as personalidades do mangá e é só isso. Mas eu entendo, o autor só escreveu isso pra mostrar como o mangá não trabalhou em certas individualidades, então eu não vou julgar muito. Próximo: Eu gostei do estilo de escrita do autor, não achei nenhum erro e ele também detalha os poderes do Mc de maneira direita e não usa comparações ridículas como eu já vi em algumas fanfics *estremece*. Eu só não gostei muito de que o Mc fica op muito rápido, ma não ligo muito, eu só comecei a ler essa fanfic por pura curiosidade mesmo.

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The_Red_Goblin

Amazing but please update more frequently and pls dont drop [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]