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A protagonist of average intelligence, average appearance, and average quirk, who even having the possibility to change some of that, did not do it. Laziness is felt at the level of Hyouka's protagonist. The title is an absolute theft because the MC is not a sprinter, he only has the quirk of monoma only a little better. And if I'm not mistaken, he is not even in the hero course, since he is Mirio's partner. At heart this is not OPMC, this is a pretty pathetic MC with a misleading title. Here you will not see a guy similar to Eobard Thawne making fun of the slowness of others, or a Barry Allen saving an entire city in a minute, it is sozo and truly VERY BORING
I really wanted to like this, but it's impossible. It couldn't even go 50 chapters before going completely off the rails, plot holes, inconsistencies, and characters that make you wish they'd die in a fire (and not because they are villains but because they are childish/stupid/just plain annoying.
You should flesh out your character and do some more research before writing. I stopped reading in the middle of the first chapter . It's rushed .The MC is deliberately made stupid . Osmosis is still a thing . Someone living as a hermit will still find out about common trends . Especially when attending a school . Trust me, I know ppl who have never watched a comic movie or anime but can recognize the most common ones and know the gist. Another thing is the writing quality .There are a lot of suggestions given by ppl in the comments . And none of their suggestions or corrections were followed . Just having good grammar makes the story 1000 times better .It makes it easier to read and understand . And become invested in the story. Unfortunately it looks like you didn't take any advice to actually better your writing. Small edits aren't difficult and should be done. Or get a beta reader who'll edit the story/chapters for you. A lot of ppl are doing it here and on fanfiction. Net. Still best of luck to you . I'll check back in a couple of months to see if you edited the story .
the way the story is moving forward, I can say that this ff is going to be one of if not the best bnha fanfic. so all i want to say is that you should definitely read this story.
The idea is great, however, I didn't like the execution. MC wastes his 3 years doing vigilante work(In my opinion) and leaves Nejire behind. Can't he just train with the villains where he lives? And I don't understand why the author put the MC in the same year as the main cast(He's older than them). I think he should be in the same class as Nejire. I came here to see Speedster ff but all I saw is a kid with a quirk that lets him copy other people's quirks. And I hate the "I'm gonna hide my power until I'm strong enough to face All Might." thing. I understand that's the logical thing to do but I came here to see Speedster ff. At least in the recent chapters, there's some good action. And before I forget, in the last chapter the author introduces other reincarnates. From this, we can say that this will be a multiverse ff with multiple reincarnators. But I won't drop this. I'll continue reading this out of my curiosity. Good luck to the author. PS: If you want MC that gives his all in everything, don't read this.
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Author tries too hard to be original unfortunately , makes mc waste 3 years of his life for “training” that could be done without going in seclusion, mc joins U.A at 18 years old. His 2 quirk is superspeed and its highly nerfed, mc personality is bland and not charismatic. I Do believe this had great potencial and the author has good talent in writing, if this was to be ever rewritten i would definetely give it a try
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love the novel their isn't that many fanfic out there that has flash or flash ability in a good story so mega props to the author and hope the story goes on for a good bit
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I love your fanfic and look forward to the sequel, but I find some points frustrating, in my eyes he lost 3 years of his life, I understand that he left to have the experience of fighting against other person as well as the experience of killing, but currently I think it would have been much better for him to follow Mirio and the others to UA high school for 3 main reasons that I will explain. The first is originality, although there must be some MHA fanfiction with an MC being in class 3-A, there must be extremely few compared to all the fanfictions of an MC in 1-A or 1-B. The second is the progression of his Quirk, as shown with his current teacher, he receives good advice from the teachers of this high school, if he had entered high school at the same time as Mirio and Nejire his Quirk would have make great progress (as Tamaki has demonstrated). The third is that the fact that he is in a 15-16 year old class when he himself is 18 seems somewhat humiliating to me. Plus, it doesn't matter if he's gone to get some combat experience, with the high school internships he could have had enough, in truth the only thing he got during those 3 years that he couldn't have had in high school is the experience of killing. He surely could not have made great progress with his speed in high school without being seen by the teachers, but he wouldn't have had any particular reason to hide it, he would have been for 3 years in one of the most protected establishments in Japan. So these are the main problems that I can see in this fanfiction, currently I'm not even sure the MC can beat Mirio yet he left 3 long years to train.
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I've only read the first chapter but I can already tell that it has high potential, the author seems skilled and the fanfic already seems interesting, now, I only hope that the updates will be frequent.
I honestly don't understand why the MC would just go into seclusion for three years. like are you afraid from diverting from cannon? irritating you want to insert into the main plotline when there are different ways to do it. it's also frustrating how hes afraid of showing off the speed force when like you said is imbued into his soul.
A protagonist of average intelligence, average appearance, and average quirk, who even having the possibility to change some of that, did not do it. Laziness is felt at the level of Hyouka's protagonist. The title is an absolute theft because the MC is not a sprinter, he only has the quirk of monoma only a little better. And if I'm not mistaken, he is not even in the hero course, since he is Mirio's partner. At heart this is not OPMC, this is a pretty pathetic MC with a misleading title. Here you will not see a guy similar to Eobard Thawne making fun of the slowness of others, or a Barry Allen saving an entire city in a minute, it is sozo and truly VERY BORING
I really wanted to like this, but it's impossible. It couldn't even go 50 chapters before going completely off the rails, plot holes, inconsistencies, and characters that make you wish they'd die in a fire (and not because they are villains but because they are childish/stupid/just plain annoying.
You should flesh out your character and do some more research before writing. I stopped reading in the middle of the first chapter . It's rushed .The MC is deliberately made stupid . Osmosis is still a thing . Someone living as a hermit will still find out about common trends . Especially when attending a school . Trust me, I know ppl who have never watched a comic movie or anime but can recognize the most common ones and know the gist. Another thing is the writing quality .There are a lot of suggestions given by ppl in the comments . And none of their suggestions or corrections were followed . Just having good grammar makes the story 1000 times better .It makes it easier to read and understand . And become invested in the story. Unfortunately it looks like you didn't take any advice to actually better your writing. Small edits aren't difficult and should be done. Or get a beta reader who'll edit the story/chapters for you. A lot of ppl are doing it here and on fanfiction. Net. Still best of luck to you . I'll check back in a couple of months to see if you edited the story .
the way the story is moving forward, I can say that this ff is going to be one of if not the best bnha fanfic. so all i want to say is that you should definitely read this story.
The idea is great, however, I didn't like the execution. MC wastes his 3 years doing vigilante work(In my opinion) and leaves Nejire behind. Can't he just train with the villains where he lives? And I don't understand why the author put the MC in the same year as the main cast(He's older than them). I think he should be in the same class as Nejire. I came here to see Speedster ff but all I saw is a kid with a quirk that lets him copy other people's quirks. And I hate the "I'm gonna hide my power until I'm strong enough to face All Might." thing. I understand that's the logical thing to do but I came here to see Speedster ff. At least in the recent chapters, there's some good action. And before I forget, in the last chapter the author introduces other reincarnates. From this, we can say that this will be a multiverse ff with multiple reincarnators. But I won't drop this. I'll continue reading this out of my curiosity. Good luck to the author. PS: If you want MC that gives his all in everything, don't read this.
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Author tries too hard to be original unfortunately , makes mc waste 3 years of his life for “training” that could be done without going in seclusion, mc joins U.A at 18 years old. His 2 quirk is superspeed and its highly nerfed, mc personality is bland and not charismatic. I Do believe this had great potencial and the author has good talent in writing, if this was to be ever rewritten i would definetely give it a try
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love the novel their isn't that many fanfic out there that has flash or flash ability in a good story so mega props to the author and hope the story goes on for a good bit
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I love your fanfic and look forward to the sequel, but I find some points frustrating, in my eyes he lost 3 years of his life, I understand that he left to have the experience of fighting against other person as well as the experience of killing, but currently I think it would have been much better for him to follow Mirio and the others to UA high school for 3 main reasons that I will explain. The first is originality, although there must be some MHA fanfiction with an MC being in class 3-A, there must be extremely few compared to all the fanfictions of an MC in 1-A or 1-B. The second is the progression of his Quirk, as shown with his current teacher, he receives good advice from the teachers of this high school, if he had entered high school at the same time as Mirio and Nejire his Quirk would have make great progress (as Tamaki has demonstrated). The third is that the fact that he is in a 15-16 year old class when he himself is 18 seems somewhat humiliating to me. Plus, it doesn't matter if he's gone to get some combat experience, with the high school internships he could have had enough, in truth the only thing he got during those 3 years that he couldn't have had in high school is the experience of killing. He surely could not have made great progress with his speed in high school without being seen by the teachers, but he wouldn't have had any particular reason to hide it, he would have been for 3 years in one of the most protected establishments in Japan. So these are the main problems that I can see in this fanfiction, currently I'm not even sure the MC can beat Mirio yet he left 3 long years to train.
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I've only read the first chapter but I can already tell that it has high potential, the author seems skilled and the fanfic already seems interesting, now, I only hope that the updates will be frequent.
I honestly don't understand why the MC would just go into seclusion for three years. like are you afraid from diverting from cannon? irritating you want to insert into the main plotline when there are different ways to do it. it's also frustrating how hes afraid of showing off the speed force when like you said is imbued into his soul.