I pulled Elsa up, held her in my arms and turned around. "Everything good?" I shouted.
"The thing still survived. Definitely a primordial." The geezer's skin was still sizzling and letting off a bit of steam, but he seemed good enough.
Every part of the woman was gone: Even her blood.
"Think she'll come back?"
There was always that chance. Though the last bit of what she said did bother me. Cursed majestic blood, was it?
And she'd mentioned something about how the three of them were connected. Though I still didn't understand who the other two were. One could have been Enira, and it was possible this woman was referencing Hyora too, though that was just a guess.
"With the wounds you gave? I doubt it."
I clicked my tongue but- at least this moron was alright.
"You, okay?" I said, looking at Elsa, who was still just looking at me, confused.
So, I'm going to need some answers from you, Yes, you! The one who's reading this.
A lot of readers have left this story. And I'm not quite sure why. Maybe because of the plot, maybe the pacing, maybe the characters or troupes or something.
Now. I want you to tell me what you dislike. Or why you think this novel sucks (Or why it doesn't?). I know I'm asking a lot.
but I want to improve. and if I don't get feedback on what's wrong in the first place, I don't think I'll be able to improve.
I often get comments like the writing is poor or maybe the characters are shallow or something like that. but, why is that and what could make a difference, that I don't understand.
so, it'd mean a lot to me, if someone could point out the flaws.
again, I'm asking a lot but, thanks in advance.