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It's amazing to read this from a perspective of someone who is unfamiliar with the surroundings and religious practices. It is difficult being in a foreign land all alone and being able to speak the language choppily. It's just refreshing. I was also impressed by the amount of research it took to find a suitable phrase or quote for the opening of each chapter. This was an amazing read.
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Incredible synopsis! Amazing plotline... I love Hitomi as a character! I'm tempted to reveal spoilers but I'm not that mean. lol😂 awaiting your next update!
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Very slow and stupid. 30 min away from the Embassy yet so many random crap happening one after another. boring boring boring boring boring boring
This is an amazing novel. I'll support the author and recommend the readers to read this work. Keep writing and updating with this same spirit. ALL THE BEST
The book was great the intro and prologue really captivated my attention. your writing was unique so keep writing!! so hats off to our talented author - the reader!
You have a very interesting way of writing and I can notice the amount of research that was put into this work. Your contrast of American and Japanese culture is executed well. You write well and I like certain vocab that you use. I am enjoying this book this far and I will read on in my spare time. Best of luck to you.
The story is good and the author knows how to sprinkle some humor in it, the author's description of events is excellent and the plot itself is interesting.
wow. Just Wow! this book is just so good I couldn't stop reading! Hitomi as a character feels so relatable and watching her through the course of the chapters, from her feelings to thoughts, was just great! Definitely A Gem of Books!(｡ﾉω＼｡)
Whoa. That escalated quickly. I knew something big was gonna happen but I was really surprised how the events had turned out. I wanna comment your writing skills. Your grammar is on point and your sentence construction is absolutely up to par. Really good writing.
I've read a couple of chapters and this story is interesting so far. The prologue was pretty intense and I like how the author described the president. I feel like the author incorporated their personal views on politics and how the politicians can be very questionable. For the characters, I originally thought that Hitomi was gonna be a cliched "I'm not like other girls" girl but she's not. Instead, she admires her best friend, Minako, even though she is the complete opposite of her. She mentions that people view Minako as promiscuous but Hitomi doesn't seem to think any less of her friend, which is a good thing since it shows that Hitomi is not super judgmental towards what other people do with their own bodies. I also like how the author described the Smiths. It feels like the author is taking from their own experience of what Mormon families in the US are like. I liked how the author described Hitomi's experience in the US and how the change impacted her. I thought it was very appropriate for the author to include Bible quotes at the beginning of each chapter since this is a story that involves angels. Now for the negatives. Mainly just poor grammar. I thought it was a little weird when the author started describing the MC's posterior and chest. However, it then related to Western beauty standards and Hitomi's self image. In that case, it was kinda relevant. But then the author mentioned that people who are muscular and very sweaty are "Totally worth it", which I thought was weird. Overall, this story is pretty interesting!
awesome story, perfectly written.I loved it, I honestly love the research done to create the story and how the author research and start the chapter using an awesome quote. I loved the story, keep it up, and good luck!
Dropped a vote here 'cause it's a very amazing story! Love it. Very unique and interesting... I love God, too. You need references in the bible to strengthen the key points of your story! 💛
A simple yet engaging read. The story flows well and the dialogue between characters is crafted nicely, in addition to the believable atmosphere that surrounds these characters. You can feel what they're going through.
I really like the writing . It makes me not want to stop reading and it just keeps pulling me in . This is really amazing !
I really liked thr authors sarcastic style, it's really interesting! The story gradually captivates you making you not help but keep on reading! There is nothing else to say other than it's amazing!
i just read the very first chapter and tbh, this story is good. keep up the good work 😳❤
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the story is well written, the I like the use of vocabulary and it rolls well, my only issue with it thus far is in the prologue it said the president quoted the Bible about peace hope ect, I feel like having an actual quote that has those meanings would be well placed there. other than that, this is great
over all good work it have good grammar but still small paced not bad as they are starting chapters. It will be great if the world is explained in detail by chapters
What an awesome work, brilliant and intriguing! It's a gem,and I really like your writing style,it's amazing,and I hope for more. Keep up the brilliant work!
theres a lot of research made in this story! it so amazing that you really pulled this off perfectly. i would recommend this to all ages because this is one hell of a great story! (btw im really hooked)
The synopsis is really amazing! Hitomi must have a lot of survival and escape plans to survive until the end! Just enough for the readers to be hooked with this kind of novel!
You've got a very eye-catching book cover, and the way you write your story is so good. Can't find a "big" word enough to express how good it is. I caught myself giggling with Hitomi's antics. Will save in my library to wait for updates.
The story is quite interesting. I like how the author added humor on it. So far, I am liking it. I will definitely look forward to its updates. ☺
I am not usually a fan of science fiction but I like your style and I am hooked to it. Looking forward to more. Kudos to the author for writing such a great story. i am loving it
I have never been into this kind of stories before so I thought that I would leave it hanging from the first chapter but once I started reading it, I was proved wrong. To put it simply, this book was very interesting and.. original! It was well thought of. The character design, the story development and all the other details screamed 'Get hooked on me!' So, hats off to our talented author!
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First chapter in and I can see that the author did a great job! I'm not really fond of this kind of genre but the author's smooth and descriptive words won me over. Gotta say I'm not disappointed, keep writing!
I love your writing, especially on the prologue, it captivated the readers to visualize it like a scene in a movie. And it goes to the next chapters as well. I can see, hear, and taste each scenes as you write it. You are very good at this one. Good job author!
It's amazing to read this from a perspective of someone who is unfamiliar with the surroundings and religious practices. It is difficult being in a foreign land all alone and being able to speak the language choppily. It's just refreshing. I was also impressed by the amount of research it took to find a suitable phrase or quote for the opening of each chapter. This was an amazing read.
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
Incredible synopsis! Amazing plotline... I love Hitomi as a character! I'm tempted to reveal spoilers but I'm not that mean. lol😂 awaiting your next update!
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Very slow and stupid. 30 min away from the Embassy yet so many random crap happening one after another. boring boring boring boring boring boring
This is an amazing novel. I'll support the author and recommend the readers to read this work. Keep writing and updating with this same spirit. ALL THE BEST
The book was great the intro and prologue really captivated my attention. your writing was unique so keep writing!! so hats off to our talented author - the reader!
You have a very interesting way of writing and I can notice the amount of research that was put into this work. Your contrast of American and Japanese culture is executed well. You write well and I like certain vocab that you use. I am enjoying this book this far and I will read on in my spare time. Best of luck to you.
The story is good and the author knows how to sprinkle some humor in it, the author's description of events is excellent and the plot itself is interesting.
wow. Just Wow! this book is just so good I couldn't stop reading! Hitomi as a character feels so relatable and watching her through the course of the chapters, from her feelings to thoughts, was just great! Definitely A Gem of Books!(｡ﾉω＼｡)
Whoa. That escalated quickly. I knew something big was gonna happen but I was really surprised how the events had turned out. I wanna comment your writing skills. Your grammar is on point and your sentence construction is absolutely up to par. Really good writing.
I've read a couple of chapters and this story is interesting so far. The prologue was pretty intense and I like how the author described the president. I feel like the author incorporated their personal views on politics and how the politicians can be very questionable. For the characters, I originally thought that Hitomi was gonna be a cliched "I'm not like other girls" girl but she's not. Instead, she admires her best friend, Minako, even though she is the complete opposite of her. She mentions that people view Minako as promiscuous but Hitomi doesn't seem to think any less of her friend, which is a good thing since it shows that Hitomi is not super judgmental towards what other people do with their own bodies. I also like how the author described the Smiths. It feels like the author is taking from their own experience of what Mormon families in the US are like. I liked how the author described Hitomi's experience in the US and how the change impacted her. I thought it was very appropriate for the author to include Bible quotes at the beginning of each chapter since this is a story that involves angels. Now for the negatives. Mainly just poor grammar. I thought it was a little weird when the author started describing the MC's posterior and chest. However, it then related to Western beauty standards and Hitomi's self image. In that case, it was kinda relevant. But then the author mentioned that people who are muscular and very sweaty are "Totally worth it", which I thought was weird. Overall, this story is pretty interesting!
awesome story, perfectly written.I loved it, I honestly love the research done to create the story and how the author research and start the chapter using an awesome quote. I loved the story, keep it up, and good luck!
Dropped a vote here 'cause it's a very amazing story! Love it. Very unique and interesting... I love God, too. You need references in the bible to strengthen the key points of your story! 💛
A simple yet engaging read. The story flows well and the dialogue between characters is crafted nicely, in addition to the believable atmosphere that surrounds these characters. You can feel what they're going through.
I really like the writing . It makes me not want to stop reading and it just keeps pulling me in . This is really amazing !
I really liked thr authors sarcastic style, it's really interesting! The story gradually captivates you making you not help but keep on reading! There is nothing else to say other than it's amazing!
i just read the very first chapter and tbh, this story is good. keep up the good work 😳❤
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Tiết lộ Spoiler the story is well written, the I like the use of vocabulary and it rolls well, my only issue with it thus far is in the prologue it said the president quoted the Bible about peace hope ect, I feel like having an actual quote that has those meanings would be well placed there. other than that, this is great
over all good work it have good grammar but still small paced not bad as they are starting chapters. It will be great if the world is explained in detail by chapters
What an awesome work, brilliant and intriguing! It's a gem,and I really like your writing style,it's amazing,and I hope for more. Keep up the brilliant work!
theres a lot of research made in this story! it so amazing that you really pulled this off perfectly. i would recommend this to all ages because this is one hell of a great story! (btw im really hooked)
The synopsis is really amazing! Hitomi must have a lot of survival and escape plans to survive until the end! Just enough for the readers to be hooked with this kind of novel!
You've got a very eye-catching book cover, and the way you write your story is so good. Can't find a "big" word enough to express how good it is. I caught myself giggling with Hitomi's antics. Will save in my library to wait for updates.
The story is quite interesting. I like how the author added humor on it. So far, I am liking it. I will definitely look forward to its updates. ☺
I am not usually a fan of science fiction but I like your style and I am hooked to it. Looking forward to more. Kudos to the author for writing such a great story. i am loving it
I have never been into this kind of stories before so I thought that I would leave it hanging from the first chapter but once I started reading it, I was proved wrong. To put it simply, this book was very interesting and.. original! It was well thought of. The character design, the story development and all the other details screamed 'Get hooked on me!' So, hats off to our talented author!
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First chapter in and I can see that the author did a great job! I'm not really fond of this kind of genre but the author's smooth and descriptive words won me over. Gotta say I'm not disappointed, keep writing!
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