One Piece-Fantasy System

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Eslyna

Writing was ok but here is whats bad. First of all HUGE plothole in your whole story. MC asks to be there 2 years before Rodger dies. Then he goes on to say he shall rescue Nami after a year... Im not sure if shes even born yet, even if she is shebwouldnt be at that island yet but with her original family, than even ifshe is for that Arlong wouldnt be going to East Blue for a while... Second Huge Plot Hole is there cant be two of the same devil fruits yet you made it so... Conflicts with wholr essence of One Piece, u can nanufacture the but those are super weak and obvious defects Story writing was average, and prologue was not that good in my opinion, was just info dump to satisfy his buffs. LASTLY MC is way too overpowered with how you wrote the system... Its worse than other OP MCs in the fanfic genre I read so far for One Piece... Also then theirs the hiatus warning. Updates started to slow this month and now hasnt been updated for 10 days when I checked so probably author decided to stop writing, I checked last chap but no notification that he needs to do sonething etc. 1.8

LV 4

Ghost_key

It's a (not even a good) try, enough to the standard of being a good read, -Way to ******* how to explain things, -understand one piece better before you write a fan fic not just watch the series, read the manga page by page to understand how devil fruit is prioritize not just how powerful you think it is, -also don't write like a passing thing, explain then dont rush, -add more details on the happening, Over all, not a good boom, try again

LV 11

Monster_Paradise

This light novel is really good, please don't give up. I see the hater below but ignore them. They seem to want to change and pave your story but this your story so ****'em. They can make their own and make his the character as weak or as overpowered as they want. Gg xp

LV 6

EmbarrassedEdge

It's good, you should read it. NO, seriously stop reading this review, just go read the chapters. Why are you still here? Go read the novel. Are you still here? Then don't forget to use power stone ..

LV 14

Yanorth

The fanfic of one piece in this site, the MC is smart and isn't a Coward, and i'm loving that he decide to create a army, Luffy and his crew is really boring in this point

LV 5

BYY210

It is one of the best one piece fanfics I've ever read !! DON'T DROP IT NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS! DON'T DROP IT NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS!! DON'T DROP IT NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS!!! DON'T DROP IT NO MATTER WHAT HAPPENS!!!!

LV 5

Shadow0012

Te digo la verdad pensé que seria una buena historia para leer, no digo que sea mala pero no llama la atención es como un poco menos que el promedio, yo diría que le daría 4/10, pero aun así es una buena historia para pasar un rato. Perdón si es mala puntuación, es solo mi opinión personal sobre la historia, espero que no se ofenda, y espero que continúes mejorando tu historia :). Saludos a todos los que fueran a leer mi comentario :).

LV 5

Special_snowflake

To me this fan-fic is one the best ones out there.If you are looking for an op MC with a system this is a good one also the Mc is building a revolutionary army with strong devil fruits this mets you wonder how the war in the end will....just please don't drop this author

LV 5

MrFlyingBoat

Good story, great story, powerful story. U know, this is very rare novel like this, i am very likw this, thanks for your update. And, please dont do drop :')

LV 4

DaoOfDao

This is one of the most enjoyable system anime fanfic that I have read. It is my rule to only review after reading 10 chapters and I must say that they were a great read: the writing was pretty good with only a few errors and the characters are unique in their own way albeit I believe it would be a little difficult remember if too many are created. Otherwise, the novel looks like it has a lot of potential and is highly recommended. Keep up the awesome work author!

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HarbingerOfGrief

I want to be the first to say that your work is amazing! Keep it up and don't rush, I will continue to support you my man. Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

LV 4

Steven_Beck_5008

This book is so good I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖

LV 4

trihexa9

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99prcntBibliophile

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novels1994

Hope he gives mc the golden dragon fruit that would be so bad ass imagine him fighting kaido then turn into a golden dragon hahahaha the Iook i imagine on his face is priceless

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butthead

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