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Change the Mc please.. Make the girl the Mc 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊 from what I see the guy doesn't have a talent at all. The girl is better than him . 😀😀😀😊😊😊😊.. 😇😇😇😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅
one of best one piece fan fic every crewmate is orignal without hindering main world of one piece.. power stone must go to this type of story
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Review for Fast update :p ...............................................................................................................................................................................
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Tiết lộ Spoiler
Now i know why this story is bland till this point... To put it bluntly... Its too simple... * Story lack development and the event happen without build up for example (-) MC just got bunch of memories of someone living in Earth... yet the only thing mention so far is that 'He have memories of One Piece World'. Its like that someone in memories have nothing else to do aside for watching and reading one piece.. (-) There are 'easy to get' training manual that left behind by MC parent... (-) There is convenient famous treasure Island that doesnt get protected by WG Then MC easily got Devil Fruit (-) Mc got Sidekicks without proper background and uniqueness (-) Strong guy appear for seemingly no reason (that shuzo guy) * To be honest... MC power is boring so far... Its just simple punches and kicks...without proper differentiation, yet he is so strong. It makes me as a reader doubt that he is strong...
This Fan fic is good... ------------------------------------- - - - - -j - - - - - - - - - - zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzź
(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)
go on! Don't listen to people who say it's boring, I like this storyline. don't stop quickly, as long as you diligently update I will support with stone. spirit!
Change the Mc please.. Make the girl the Mc 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊 from what I see the guy doesn't have a talent at all. The girl is better than him . 😀😀😀😊😊😊😊.. 😇😇😇😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😅😆😆😅
one of best one piece fan fic every crewmate is orignal without hindering main world of one piece.. power stone must go to this type of story
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Review for Fast update :p ...............................................................................................................................................................................
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Tiết lộ Spoiler Now i know why this story is bland till this point... To put it bluntly... Its too simple... * Story lack development and the event happen without build up for example (-) MC just got bunch of memories of someone living in Earth... yet the only thing mention so far is that 'He have memories of One Piece World'. Its like that someone in memories have nothing else to do aside for watching and reading one piece.. (-) There are 'easy to get' training manual that left behind by MC parent... (-) There is convenient famous treasure Island that doesnt get protected by WG Then MC easily got Devil Fruit (-) Mc got Sidekicks without proper background and uniqueness (-) Strong guy appear for seemingly no reason (that shuzo guy) * To be honest... MC power is boring so far... Its just simple punches and kicks...without proper differentiation, yet he is so strong. It makes me as a reader doubt that he is strong...
This Fan fic is good... ------------------------------------- - - - - -j - - - - - - - - - - zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzź
(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ლ(╹◡╹ლ)
go on! Don't listen to people who say it's boring, I like this storyline. don't stop quickly, as long as you diligently update I will support with stone. spirit!